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Sonnet № 131860

The nymph steals the farm-son

by <~>

Member since 2002 · Posted 10 Oct 2005 · Edited 11 Jan 2006 · 11 comments

Before I captured you, you sought meat and bread and peace. My turnings bade you cease seeking solitude that old life brought. I swept the earth stippling stubble in grooves and chains of dance; moved your heart to gambol, stole you from your ramble, melted you, stubborn man. You spied my moves and judged my worth, left behind hoe and plow and dwell with me, now.

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[9] Dovina 10-Oct-05/6:43 PM Reply
Verse 2 is especially nice.
[n/a] richa 11-Oct-05/7:44 AM Reply
The lathe of fact indeed. :(
[9] zodiac 19-Oct-05/10:32 AM Reply
I love "turn wooden on the lathe of fact", the best image on poemranker in months and the lynchpin, I think, of this poem.

In the original you turned wooden, right? I think that would be better. The rest loses me. I don't know what distinction you're making between November and December (or heart and breast), and can't feel the metaphor of ghosts (which are essentially metaphors, no?) And are you lathing things into firewood? How odd.
[n/a] <~> › zodiac 19-Oct-05/10:40 AM Reply
november is cold, but decmber is colder still, is what i was going for. there are also the holidays to consider, although that analogy is very abstruse.

and yes, i am lathing into firewood. i wonder if my love is wasted on him.

thank you for the compliment.
[8] Tintagiles 19-Oct-05/11:12 PM Reply
'Despite November in my heart/and December at my breast'-- nice. I admit I was going to simply congratulate ou on using November as opposed to another month, but the addition of December actually works.
[8] Tintagiles › Tintagiles 19-Oct-05/11:13 PM Reply
Then again, what else would one expect of you, dear Tilde?
[8] Caducus 20-Oct-05/9:23 AM Reply
I want lines 5 and 8 - lathe wonderful use of it too.
[9] Dovina 21-Oct-05/11:22 AM Reply
"phantoms of future turn wooden on the lathe of fact." !!!
[n/a] richa 12-Jan-06/1:49 PM Reply
This is a terrible liberty. :(
[n/a] <~> › richa 12-Jan-06/1:51 PM Reply
i know, i know.
[9] Ranger 16-Sep-06/2:47 AM Reply
Sweet, nearly cute :-)