Lyric № 132287
Incommunicado blues (fixed, except for Dovina)
Haifa, 2005 -
I'm having a hard time holding things straight.
I keep
loitering in bus stations, watching women flip
backwards through magazines. Seems, late-
ly, maybe
I ought to move back home, learn
some new vocabulary, Kylie, this tongue-dance,
good metaphor.
The lights click on. In the uplands it's flooding.
And I'd like
to tell you, oh, I wish sometimes you'd find
me compelling, I think you would if I were
ever around. I want to tell you I fear
falling into religion just for a scaffold
of proper names, greetings, expansive gestures.
I'd be two toothless men arguing fares
with knives for a caucus of bored travellers.
I'd as-one with these waiting women pause,
glance knowingly at this departure lounge
ceiling loudspeaker, and hear.
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I want to tell you I fear
falling into religion
and
the scaffold
of proper nouns, greetings, and expansive gestures -
but the sentence seems convoluted to me, and i am not sure of your meaning. not that i need to be sure, it's jsut that i want a clearer reason for these bold statement to link in with that lasting, last image.
Tongue-dance would be a good metaphor, but since you didn't use it, that gives me the right to steal it.
Religion will give you a a scaffold of proper nouns, greetings, and expansive gestures, but then the sentence fumbles, as if the word-dance becomes a twisted twist.
You're right, I'm only talking about actual tongues dancing around inside of mouths. Feel free to use it, but there's the possibility I'm using it from someone else, I'm not sure. If I am, it's Don Delillo in The Names.
The last part is supposed to be another reason for falling into religion. It's not worded right and I don't know yet how to fix it. Suggestions?
I want to tell you I fear
falling into religion--just for a scaffold
of proper nouns, greetings, expansive gestures;
to be as-one with these waiting women--pause,
glance knowingly at a departure lounge
ceiling loudspeaker, and hear.
does that mean what you're looking for?
I don't fear religion, I fear becoming religious only for a language/anchor. That's a big concern for me now; my first six months here I'd say 30-40% of my vocabulary was somehow religious. The hazards of living in a Muslim country, yes, but I thought it was applicable in America, too.
I'm constantly surprised - and grateful - I'm still married. The way it works is she's more of an adventurer/homebody than me. One-and-a-half months back in America and she's already moved out to Alaska.
Also ironic that you recently scolded me for having strung together phrases.
Love the toothless men with knives line.
A little Freudian Psycho-babble for ya. Religion is in a warm vagina. You're not gonna find it in the chosen land. Atheism is in a masturbater's fist. Your religion's in alaska but your pride is in your hand.
ALChemy psycho-babble: Get your ass to Alaska pronto lest thou fall amongst ye dumb morons.
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I was on vacation, as you were from my constant debating.
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