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The Dreamer (Sonnet) by Nicholas Jones The visions that appear to me at night
come when I sleep but stay when I awake;
they are so real they infiltrate my sight,
so vivid that their power can often make
me question my existence on this earth.
Last night I saw a stream of weird shapes
and wondered how exactly I give birth
to visions such as those my mind creates.
Yet I cannot describe what I have seen
and this inability to tell makes be afraid -
how can I not recall the horror of my dreams?
From what flaw within myself are these things made?
I can provide you with no evidence or proof
but please believe these visions tell the truth.
Up the ladder:
of Arabia
Down the ladder:
A Perfectly Reasonable Question
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Posted: October 23, 2002 1:15 AM PDT; Last modified: October 23, 2002 1:15 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.1522365 Overall Rank: 1060 Comments:
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Christof @ 195.172.133.226
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23-Oct-02/1:33 AM
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Good to see another sonnet from you - you handled it well in 'The Canvassers' and also in this. This is more Keatsian as well in its self-analysis and fear.
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Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.200
> Christof
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23-Oct-02/1:36 AM
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You can't beat a good sonnet. It is always sobering to think that all the great poets, from Petrarch and Shakespeare onwards, have used the same form; I cannot possibly compete, but it's fun to try.
the more you write them, the more easily they flow. strength in discipline. nice work.
Quite lovely. I forgive you all the inexact rhymes
Redundant. Lacks emotional language, or better said, the emotion is lost, I can't explain. I want to believe the fear, feel it.
I think the lack of emotion you feel is due to the constraint of the sonnet form; I'm not sure if I really mastered it in this one. I realise it describes a state of mind rather than evoking it.
absolute rubbish
very well done. 9
Nylon instruments of death. 10!
practically perfect...9 sound good?
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