Re: The Last of The Winds by emilyowey	16-Jun-06/7:39 AM
You've got a great idea here. I'll say what they often say to me. Make it more poetic! Take these thoughts and form the words into pleasing and provocative lines.
Re: Ice by MacFrantic	16-Jun-06/7:35 AM
I like this and relate to it, but can't say why. "Spending your luck" as is yours is mine to spend - alright, thought provoking. And to remember winter while pondering it in November is long-range thinking. And obstacles as "growing holes in my frozen face" - yep, I get that.
Re: a comment on Eenie Meenie Minie Moe by Edna Sweetlove	16-Jun-06/7:26 AM
Is this the only excuse for an arguement left on dying Poemranker? If Edna did not routinely delete every response she can't smear with shit, I might get involved. This is ridiculous.
Re: a comment on Blessings by amanda_dcosta	16-Jun-06/7:21 AM
DA's only been banged by a door post on the head while blundering through the simplest of responses to Poemranker comments.
Re: a comment on Blessings by amanda_dcosta	15-Jun-06/8:01 PM
Well, I see, after a long absence that we're all back in form like goslings after a long-necked mother. This god / no-god debate is always fun and good for slander. Amanda finds God in the slightest natural change, while Dark Angel finds Him not even in the biggest of bangs. I think He's the lovliest entity I can imagine. Poemranker seems in the throws of death, like some great beast becoming extinct for lack of adaptation. And Edna Sourlove is no help. We need the rank smell of blood around this place.
Re: Blessings by amanda_dcosta	15-Jun-06/7:53 PM
It's an uplifting verse for church and friendly settings like greeting cards. As such, the rhythm and rhyme should be consistent, which they mostly are.
Re: Whispers to Isabelle by Caducus	1-Jun-06/7:40 AM
This looking back and seeing him in every reflection and distorted mirror image has got to stop. You're no help with that. Good poem.
Re: Herencia Latina by Ranger	1-Jun-06/7:36 AM
Welcome back. You didn't miss much. Have you been in school or some whorehouse in Mexico? Sorry, had to ask after reading the Latin soulish tone of this. Are red lights still used to show she's open for business? That was my first impression, but you've left a Heisenberg uncertainty that could kill a cat. Maybe you mean "June" not "lune." "Your heritage upon my fingertips" good line.
Re: Split Me by Sunny	23-May-06/11:06 AM
If this is about open-chest surgery, it's very dramatic. But I have a problem with the patient knowing what is taking place while under anaesthesia.
Re: Witch hanging at Dunchurch by Mona Lisa	23-May-06/11:03 AM
An historical event like this requires, in my opinion, a longer development, prior to the punch line. A more flowing form might work better.
Re: Monsters by wilco	23-May-06/10:55 AM
I like this a lot, but think "monsters" is too strong a word to describe them. They're not that bad - just trying to get by.
Re: a comment on Godproof Hat by Dovina	23-May-06/10:39 AM
Buddahism is a godproof hat, or tries to be, because it stands in for religion, relieving its followers from the almighty.
Re: a comment on Godproof Hat by Dovina	23-May-06/10:36 AM
The last stanza reminds me of a conversation between a forest ranger, a maker of gold, and a love-torn woman seeking shelter from the ravages of persistant atheism fighting in some netherworld against the forces of an almighty.
Re: Still Air Sticks by Sunny	21-May-06/12:15 PM
Well, this doesn't deserve a 1, even if does have some problems. I've voted higher that it deserves just to average out Edna, who hasn't a clue. I don't know how she bellowed from morrows, which are future days.
Re: A Prayer For God's Soldiers As They Kill For Him by Edna Sweetlove	21-May-06/12:08 PM
I repeat: "Do you always delete comments before you reply to them?" If you want feedback here, get with the fricking program!!!
Re: a comment on Foray by richa	21-May-06/12:04 PM
Wow, I was late, and almost out the door, when an urge overtook me, not fully formed, and grossly malformed in hindsight. Sorry, no time for grammar class. Must grope grossly godward – Sunday, ya' know.
Re: a comment on Foray by richa	21-May-06/6:50 AM
But writing math poems about waliking in circes does, as evidenced by making you at least to start trying counting. We shall overcome!
Re: a comment on Seizures by Sunny	20-May-06/9:06 AM
Yes, but I can only comment on the poem, not your explanation of it.
Re: a comment on Foray by richa	20-May-06/9:04 AM
A mile less than a woman can.
Re: Seizures by Sunny	19-May-06/5:13 PM
"Tulips like porcelain" is good. But seizures? How so? The last line refers to a non-weak person. How are old pictures apparitions? Otherwise, some good lines.