Re: The Smoke That Follows by PsydewaysTears	19-Jun-22/1:07 PM
"after withering to the floor, consider that you once stood." It's a call to come back, I think. I like the middles and the edges, wanting her to see the "why," to keep sorting the middles.
Re: a handful of almonds by Bill Z Bub	3-Jun-22/12:37 PM
"the sweeping scythe of time" "surrounded by the blanket of your hair"
Re: A Song Of Waking by PsydewaysTears	3-Jun-22/12:33 PM
The birds, the birds, what finer form of life!
Re: Care-Home by pete	4-Feb-22/3:22 PM
A good tribute and also honest She was good at perspective and shading and stuff She was good with colour, but it wasn’t enough She must have been a good wife
Re: False Memory by nentwined	23-Jun-21/12:03 PM
You call it "false memory" and I hope it is. Otherwise it's a morbid, but uniquely phrased, look back. Perhaps a mind like mine; it can go either way.
Re: nothing to say by nentwined	10-Apr-21/10:54 AM
ah, not so, not so, not so. much to say, just play, I say some holds sway, some sinks away take the fun, don't run, you're no bum
Re: "Threenager" by nypoet22	10-Apr-21/10:50 AM
they carry a boy to his first filled lungs--it works well. his confusion unresolved . . . too late to say goodbye--rather glib, I think.
Re: the edge of creation - spoken word by nentwined	11-Mar-21/12:35 PM
Climbing a mountain, my consciousness waned into delirium. and I could not fees my toes. Lack of thought unsought. Coming down, reality returned, and the end of one tow was black.
Re: living stone by nentwined	11-Mar-21/12:30 PM
Peter writes, “As you come to him [Jesus], the living Stone—rejected by humans but chosen by God and precious to him—you also, like living stones, are being built into a spiritual house.” Is it a fancy flight, a metaphor? a fractal? or can consciousness be squeezed from a real stone, eons ago in some primordial soup?
Re: Game Over by nentwined	11-Mar-21/12:21 PM
Dismal take on life. Everything ends in death. btw, a twist of the pliers fixed me faucet, and a piece of me torn away saved my life. I too have looked at it both ways.
Re: the edge of creation - spoken word by nentwined	27-Jan-21/5:26 PM
Rocky Mountain high says John Denver you not far from never odd to introduce God high elevation work hard there that's the high
Re: Getting Ahead by Jill Stockinger	27-Jan-21/5:18 PM
yes I would. I'd use everything inside your head. If only I could.
Re: the product of repetition by nentwined	29-Dec-20/2:11 PM
Judging from link link in your comment, I think that repetition in your poem refers to musical repetition. Otherwise, I would be drawn to assembly lines or women who don't listen and simply repeat themselves. And what is the product of the musical repetition? You don't say. Frost says, "and many miles before I sleep" "and many miles before I sleep" and that works for me. It changes the doer, revises his attitude.
Re: Missing by Jill Stockinger	29-Dec-20/2:03 PM
For all the comments you have left here in the past few days, most of them finding some good, refusing to inflict a harsh remark, I wish you finding stars in dark skies, finding love that holds, and find the "you" you are looking for.
Re: Aztec Priest by Jill Stockinger	29-Dec-20/2:00 PM
Your love is something I do not want. Take him. Do what you want. But this sounds codependent and mutually destructive. Nevertheless, you've said it well.
Re: Cockroaches by Jill Stockinger	29-Dec-20/1:57 PM
I imagine this being about poems that write, usually after considerable wine, and read the next day before they have escaped to somewhere, and they are like cockroaches--slimy infectious creatures. I keep them though, tuck them away for they are part of me, and in the right light and the right revision might become. Become what? Nothing probably, but who knows.
Re: a comment on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	21-Dec-20/7:01 PM
Thanks Jill, nice to find someone here with nentwined and me after too long silence. I hope you stay awhile.
Re: Nadine by nentwined	16-Dec-20/5:51 PM
A poetry workshop this evening allows bringing an outside poem bringing yours, I requested comments giving no personal info on you, and none of our discussion. They thought the first verse joins the title somehow. they say it describes Nadine, that she or it, is a bit wild. Something happened, they say, before the third verse something that lasts forever, and is always remembered so the apparent redundancy of the two words is not. The last verse, they said, reinforces importance of the memory. they like this verse best. The "quantum" verse was not well understood nor do I fully get it. but memory is like that, takes metaphoric form sometimes a life remembered as a rainbow something in quantum space
Re: Nadine by nentwined	16-Dec-20/2:50 PM
She must be or have been a fierce woman, a crashing wave. Remembered and folded, now written about. Or I could be completely wrong. Just a first impression
Re: a comment on Sunrise at McDonalds by Dovina	4-Dec-20/6:22 PM
Yeah, it lacks lyric jerks like story not fiction, but events no way to write poetry just hit 'em in the nose