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Game Over (Free verse) by nentwined
If you do everything correctly everything just so you will die. Context determines when a twist of the pliers is torture, metaphor or hyperbole. Blood in your mouth a reminder of life and death A piece of you torn away and stitched together. Same as every moment any moment constantly reborn.

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.0
Weighted score: 5.357609
Overall Rank: 3383
Posted: February 22, 2021 9:20 AM PST; Last modified: February 22, 2021 9:20 AM PST
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[7] Dovina @ 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1 | 11-Mar-21/12:21 PM | Reply
Dismal take on life. Everything ends in death. btw, a twist of the pliers fixed me faucet, and a piece of me torn away saved my life. I too have looked at it both ways.
[9] nypoet22 @ 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1 | 24-Mar-21/10:22 AM | Reply
last stanza not necessary, trying to be too broad. stick with the image and stop where it stops.
[8] SupremeDreamer @ 127.0.0.1 | 25-Apr-21/3:12 AM | Reply
I say take out the first stanza.
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