Game Over

Member since 2001 · Posted 22 Feb 2021 · 3 comments

If you do everything correctly everything just so you will die. Context determines when a twist of the pliers is torture, metaphor or hyperbole. Blood in your mouth a reminder of life and death A piece of you torn away and stitched together. Same as every moment any moment constantly reborn.

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[7] Dovina 11-Mar-21/12:21 PM Reply

Dismal take on life. Everything ends in death. btw, a twist of the pliers fixed me faucet, and a piece of me torn away saved my life. I too have looked at it both ways.

[9] nypoet22 24-Mar-21/10:22 AM Reply

last stanza not necessary, trying to be too broad. stick with the image and stop where it stops.

[8] SupremeDreamer 25-Apr-21/3:12 AM Reply

I say take out the first stanza.