| Re: fly me away by damianlow |
22-Jan-05/1:41 PM |
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Better than most of the pop lyrics I hear. I'd like it get into the kinda mood of "Bridge Over Troubled Waters" a little more though.
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| Re: Homophobic Self-Help Poem. (For the men who drive a mustang) by SupremeDreamer |
22-Jan-05/1:36 PM |
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Well, as long as you write about and don't do it that's good. It happens I am a woman and my tits do sag, but ya know what, I wear a bra and stand erect and go about as if I had something worthwhile to do besides write and write about sadness.
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| Re: #28 by Lifeboatman |
22-Jan-05/1:30 PM |
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Is Shakespeare your tutor? I don't like most of his sonets and I don't like this, even if it is hard to write.
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| Re: Life is my agony by Prince of Void |
22-Jan-05/1:27 PM |
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Oh, for God's sake get over it! Have another drink. Write another poem. Go for a walk. Do something! This sitting around feeling sorry for yourself, well it's selfish and wrong. If I were on the stool next to you I'd buy you a drink.
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| Re: Rustic Rainstorm by MacFrantic |
22-Jan-05/7:05 AM |
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I like the cow pies turning ripe in the rain and their smell in the wind, a fresh, good smell. I've had my own private thunderstorm and liked it very much.
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| Re: a comment on Enlightenment by Dovina |
21-Jan-05/6:28 AM |
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The Enlightenment gave rise to the American Experiment, the French Revolution, and the now ubiquitous understanding that all people have intrinsically equal rights to purse happiness. Everywhere except England. Your âgentlemenâ are feudal reminder of what our ancestors fought to destroy. And now your prime minister tries to make it all right by latching onto our president like a whining boy to a big brother. No, Sir Robins, your lance is obtund. You live in dreams of dead glory.
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| Re: a comment on Enlightenment by Dovina |
20-Jan-05/10:50 AM |
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Oh, Wow, could I have been so cruel as to imply that asses should be kicked?
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| Re: a comment on Sounds by Dovina |
20-Jan-05/6:45 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Sounds by Dovina |
20-Jan-05/6:45 AM |
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Thanks for honesty. One sound that will not change is the sound of a fart in church. Maybe I should write about that.
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| Re: black dog by wilco |
20-Jan-05/6:33 AM |
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Is it from the dog's pov? The "red on black" line makes me think it's an old dog, and the master needed to kill it as we do with old dogs.
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| Re: Buried On Hollowed Ground by Enchantres |
16-Jan-05/8:47 PM |
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"Now you see," but how so? You imply consciousness after suicide death. Better to say the killer is gone and knows nothing. vote-7 only because it's well written.
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| Re: Vulture by Stacy Stewart |
16-Jan-05/8:41 PM |
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| Re: Only Me by heartlessempath |
16-Jan-05/8:35 PM |
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What a terrible father you must have! Quite well written and convincing. Too much punctuation. The title - why only you?
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| Re: A Fake Hollywood by Blindpoetry |
16-Jan-05/6:13 PM |
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They named Hollywood after what they thought was holly. It was not holly, but a look-alike, the toyan bush, which also has red berries at Christmas time. Hollywood's been a fake ever since. And use spellcheck!
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| Re: a comment on Rain by dancin_n_da_moonlite |
16-Jan-05/6:06 PM |
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I'm only laughing at myself, the fact that I have been in Katie's place and answered a man as she answered. The best thing about a poem is to find myself in it.
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| Re: Rendered Genderless by PsydewaysTears |
16-Jan-05/6:55 AM |
Good meter and rhyme, but the message is overstated. Lines like "I can become Anything I want to be" don't cut it, not in my world. I hear what you're saying, but please keep it real.
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| Re: A Dear John by misheila |
16-Jan-05/6:48 AM |
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I don't like this one nearly as well as your other. This seems written out of anger without close attention to craft. It's a whiny poem. And double-spacing doesn't help, nor do the lack of a spaces after commas.
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| Re: Rain by dancin_n_da_moonlite |
15-Jan-05/8:19 PM |
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Yes, I understand Katie. It's how I answer his questions, then re-answer when he asks again. Nicely done.
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| Re: a comment on In The Beginning by Dovina |
15-Jan-05/8:16 PM |
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These are the easy questions, which if answered, lead to the hard ones.
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| Re: American Semele (Edit) by Sasha |
15-Jan-05/4:03 PM |
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The first verse is very tender and warm. The first two lines of the second verse give it all away.
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