Re: Tra-la-la by Lifeboatman	15-Jan-05/2:40 PM
From the title, I take it as a pipedream. "in your birth canal grows the concept of my desire" a very sensuous line if spoken in the right time and place,
Re: In the Shadows by Beyond_Dreams	15-Jan-05/2:34 PM
Like one of Shakespeare’s boring sonnets, too much gush, too little substance. I'd give most of his the same vote.
Re: the pretenders by PopoyMola	15-Jan-05/2:18 PM
Why the ....? The language here is very simple, too simple, tenses sometimes wrong, grammar poor.
Re: Disturbed Destiny by misheila	15-Jan-05/2:16 PM
I have experienced this many times. Capturing the dream or the last thought before sleep or the waking thought, is difficult. Translation from sleep thinking into wake thinking is hard, but so worthwhile. recaptire -> capture period after desires.
Re: a comment on Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina	15-Jan-05/1:32 PM
Never looked at it that way. I thought baseball was for the base who want to play balls.
Re: Can't Fight No More by jroday	13-Jan-05/2:48 PM
I can't say it any better than: http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=118322 If you're reading these words, you know you are appreciated by at least one, and I'll bet a year's longevity the Mrs. jroday would say the same.
Re: a comment on Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina	13-Jan-05/8:58 AM
Sorry if this offends the gentleman’s game of Ball over there in Merry Old England, but the immigrants here in the New World tend toward chewing of tobacco, cursing, and carrying on fistfights with the fans.
Re: a comment on Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina	13-Jan-05/8:57 AM
It's the sort of genius that falls from heaven in brief moments of enlightenment, like after a Long Beach in an Italian bar.
Re: The Unsung Hero by Bhaskaryya	12-Jan-05/10:13 PM
A good flow and a good point.
Re: Nectar of Infinity by MacFrantic	12-Jan-05/10:05 PM
It flows nicely and contains some awsome images, but altogether, it lacks motive and is too broad. It fails to pinpoint any real life issue.
Re: The Poet's Plight by dougsoderstrom	11-Jan-05/7:49 AM
You've make a pretty good shot at poetic rhythm here. "Hidden, yet for the world to see" is a good line because it's a prospect to keep one going.
Re: You have 7 hours to live... now here's the bad news by D. $ Fontera	8-Jan-05/9:25 AM
If it's about telemarketing, the title should give some hint. It seems like you're talking about several things at once.
Re: The Mighty Brahmaputra by Bhaskaryya	8-Jan-05/9:08 AM
I think you sacrifice too much for the rhymes - grammar, clarity, even interest.
Re: Tough Act To Follow by jroday	8-Jan-05/8:30 AM
"Love" means many things in English. I wish we had all the Greek words with their different meanings for what we lump into "love." "Agape" comes close to your poem. Some folks are hard to love by any definition.
Re: a comment on The Way by Dovina	8-Jan-05/8:13 AM
If you know for certain that I didn't hear kids worrying about going to hell and that I heard it from Pascal, then you are delusional, or my strict religious upbringing was all an illusion. Whatever. I think the poem holds together on an emotional level for some who have struggled with religious belief and what it means. I am not strongly Buddhist or Taoist, but appreciate some of their philosophies. Someday I’ll figure out how you can be so confident in knowing what I think and believe.
Re: Let God Unwrite Itself by daggatolar	7-Jan-05/6:50 AM
A good start, using rite, but at the end where you change to "write" I lost the thing that seemed well staged - that we can rite out God. You seem to introduce the notion that god was written and can be unwritten too near to the end.
Re: Fanboy by Blindpoetry	7-Jan-05/6:44 AM
Comma after Traveling?
Re: a comment on Math Poem 3 by Dovina	6-Jan-05/8:47 PM
In “Math Poem - Square Root of Minus Never” maybe they’ll replace it with “fractal.” I bet they can’t wait for the next installment.
Re: a comment on The Way by Dovina	6-Jan-05/8:37 PM
I used to hear kids say they’re not sure whether they believe and catch them figuring they might go to hell because they didn’t believe hard enough. “Help my unbelief” kinda thinking. Was Yoda Buddhist?
Re: a comment on The Way by Dovina	6-Jan-05/7:28 PM
It’s more like not finding it or even looking for it, but waking up to it.