poemranker ::Tra-la-la by Lifeboatman

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Free verse № 118298

Tra-la-la

Member since 2003 · Posted 13 Jan 2005 · 4 comments

You insist that I frolick with you In this Garden of Eden you have set up in your backyard But I don't frolick, sweetheart. I stutter, While you hit me with your old school love Like a new age enlightenment And how classic your emotions can be Like the Bard at his worst while drunk with ale Or an Italian painter at his orgasm Dear lady, how you swoon me with your haves and have-nots That I look at you in contrast with you past YOu were a hot chick then And now you are pregnant with my ideas And in your birth canal grows the concept of my desire The desire to be with you until nothing is left But you and me

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[8] Dovina 15-Jan-05/2:40 PM Reply
From the title, I take it as a pipedream. "in your birth canal grows the concept of my desire" a very sensuous line if spoken in the right time and place,
[n/a] Lifeboatman › Dovina 17-Jan-05/4:46 AM Reply
must always be sensual and shouldn't be taken otherwise...
[n/a] zodiac › Lifeboatman 17-Jan-05/5:40 AM Reply
Do you know what part of a chick's anatomy the birth canal is? Do you know what grows there?

Yeast, and about nothing else.
[n/a] Lifeboatman › zodiac 18-Jan-05/4:00 AM Reply
delicious, isn't it??