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Let God Unwrite Itself

Member since 2004 · Posted 7 Jan 2005 · 3 comments

Can the poem not rite Out the poet Lunge on the lung and life out Can the poem not rite Art Is meaningless itself not a meaning Can the poem not right The heart To stair feelings capable of everything Unmaking the maker The made is what is... writing God. The poem Can also unwrite God.

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[7] Dovina 7-Jan-05/6:50 AM Reply

A good start, using rite, but at the end where you change to "write" I lost the thing that seemed well staged - that we can rite out God. You seem to introduce the notion that god was written and can be unwritten too near to the end.

[8] Crakyamuni › Dovina 7-Jan-05/9:52 AM Reply

This poem touches on a great deal of the metaphysical forces in written word, but in places I'm unsure of what to make of lines,(To "Stair" feelings capable of everything).

It's good, feels genuine.

[10] zodiac 8-Jan-05/6:08 AM Reply

Bow'ls, all of you. And you're all missing one very important detail. A cookie to whomever guesses right.