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#28 (Free verse) by Lifeboatman
Ere Phoebus trespasses Olympus' court, Foremost in Her delight is Selene Cynthian arrows do not abort Their flightpasses of glowing beams; Shot through flightpasses of glowing dreams Twighlight showers of moonlight let grow The vanity of every midnight rose To bloom before they fade to-morrow To linger yet with life they had borrowed To be on Persephone's table on the morrow And while Hyperion is fond of his daughter So is Aphrodite's delight is in that child Thus no evening rose is born of ether But all of its darkness made mild All of its beauty left wild

Up the ladder: bleeding
Down the ladder: Spanish Woman

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5928
Posted: January 21, 2005 10:12 PM PST; Last modified: January 21, 2005 10:12 PM PST
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[8] Dovina @ 205.184.70.141 | 22-Jan-05/1:30 PM | Reply
Is Shakespeare your tutor? I don't like most of his sonets and I don't like this, even if it is hard to write.
[n/a] Shuushin @ 70.16.192.124 > Dovina | 23-Jan-05/7:29 AM | Reply
(not a sonnet)
[8] Dovina @ 209.247.222.102 > Shuushin | 23-Jan-05/5:29 PM | Reply
No, but it has that Shakespeare sonnet feel.
[n/a] Shuushin @ 70.16.222.243 > Dovina | 23-Jan-05/5:58 PM | Reply
agreed. Don't know why I have ta open mah mouth all the time.
[n/a] zodiac @ 212.38.134.51 > Shuushin | 26-Jan-05/12:50 AM | Reply
Ibid.
[n/a] zodiac @ 212.38.134.51 > Dovina | 26-Jan-05/12:49 AM | Reply
No it doesn't. Please, please for the love of God stop talking about Shakespeare.
[n/a] zodiac @ 212.38.134.51 > zodiac | 26-Jan-05/12:50 AM | Reply
That comment was intended for Dovina. Fuck nentwined's crap comment nesting.
[n/a] Lifeboatman @ 203.104.94.2 > zodiac | 26-Jan-05/4:13 AM | Reply
that's okay.. and anout the Bard.. well, he's dead, isn't he?? can you give me a zero??
[n/a] Lifeboatman @ 203.104.94.2 > Dovina | 24-Jan-05/3:59 AM | Reply
Then dont; the least you could've done is give me a zero... sheeesh, is that to hard to ask??
[10] SupremeDreamer @ 66.248.82.95 > Dovina | 26-Jan-05/6:59 AM | Reply
Do you call everything that you can't understand "Shakespearian"?

It's poetic use of greek mythology... not too hard to follow, even if you don't know greek mytho, look up the gods mentioned and you should be able to gather the gist and direction of the arrow mam.

Nothing personal, I'm no fan of Shakespeare either, but it's not the dreaded Achilles heel of my existence, Zeusian electric grudge aside, that it personifies that which bewilders me.
[8] Dovina @ 205.184.70.141 > SupremeDreamer | 26-Jan-05/10:48 AM | Reply
Your green nesting box lies with my red one (shurely no pun could be intended) so you must be responding to me. I can't understand many things, some of them I call zodiacian, even Dovinian.
[n/a] zodiac @ 212.118.11.12 > Dovina | 28-Jan-05/4:06 AM | Reply
Would you say you tend to find words ending in '-ian' generally more meaningful than other words?

PS-Anyone can tell this poem is more Anne Cecil de Vereian than anything else. You just think it's Shakespearean because you don't get Shakespeare and you don't get this. But if you think about it for a moment, you'll realise you don't get Shakespeare because you're not bright or educated at an Accredited Poetry School, and you don't get this poem because it has no point and is a shitpile of pisspoor allusions and non sequitors with bad grammar in between.
[8] Dovina @ 205.184.70.141 > zodiac | 28-Jan-05/10:57 AM | Reply
You just called me not bright and brilliant in the same sentence. How enlightening! And you missed the _____point!
[n/a] zodiac @ 217.144.15.36 > Dovina | 29-Jan-05/2:57 AM | Reply
No I didn't. No, it's not. And no I didn't.
[n/a] Lifeboatman @ 203.104.94.2 > SupremeDreamer | 27-Jan-05/4:24 AM | Reply
what's eating you up these days, dude... poor diet?? How've you been anyway??
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