Escape

Member since 2006 · Posted 14 Feb 2006 · 15 comments

Right now I don't feel too well. I feel like I was born in hell. My feelings are a big mistake. I cannot give until I take. I must escape this crazy world. Full of lies and pain and hurt. I must get out into fresh air. I have to leave this leaky lair. My head is throbbing full of pain. My eyes are filling up with rain. I cannot speak to save my life. Resistance is futile so swallow the knife. It's not like I can't leave this place, This angry world nothing but a race. I choose to stay and live the rest. Right now, it's nothing but a test. I'm drowning, drowning, in my tears That swallow all the hateful fears. I must give up and see the end. I can't just sit here, I can't pretend.

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[10] edgar-allen-poe-rox 14-Feb-06/10:21 AM Reply

wow.. is that seriously you're firstpoem?.. wow..wayyy better than my first O.O
XD
i suck -_-

[n/a] raven_the_poet › edgar-allen-poe-rox 14-Feb-06/10:23 AM Reply

that's not my first, my first is called When It Snows. You can go to poetry.com and search my name to read it.

[n/a] ALChemy 14-Feb-06/10:33 AM Reply

Sonnets should contain at least one identifiable characteristic of a formal sonnet. See E. A. Poe Rox's poem and read the comment I left for him. Goog luck Raven.
I look forward to posts from both of you.

Ps. And yes I think Poe rox too.

[n/a] Ranger › ALChemy 14-Feb-06/10:49 AM Reply

The Raven is and always will be the icon of poetry. But did you know there's strong evidence linking the man to a murder of, I believe, a matchstick-selling girl?

[n/a] ALChemy › Ranger 14-Feb-06/11:00 AM Reply

No I didn't but he's had so many enemies in his time I wouldn't be surprised if one of them accused him of being Jack The Ripper.
Please find me a link if you can I'm quite interested.

[n/a] Ranger › ALChemy 14-Feb-06/11:01 AM Reply

I'll see what I can dredge up, although seeing as I read it in a book I had ages ago I don't know how much info will be on the net.

[n/a] Ranger › Ranger 14-Feb-06/11:28 AM Reply

Cigar girl, not matchstick girl, my bad. I can't find the actual article itself (the book appears to still be in print and under copyright), but the theory is that the story of Marie Roget was based on the actual murder of a girl named Mary Cecilia Rogers, and that the details in the story fit too closely to actual facts from the crime which I believe Poe would not have had access to. Or something like that. I forget, but next time I'm home I'll have a look for the book.

[n/a] ALChemy › Ranger 14-Feb-06/11:43 AM Reply

Yes I recall reading something about Poe using the real murder as the basis for the story. I think I even read something about him thinking he might solve the case while writing the mystery.

[n/a] Ranger › ALChemy 14-Feb-06/3:54 PM Reply

I belive that the description of a man allegedly involved in the real murder was a very accurate description of Poe himself; I'm sure there were other details too, but that's the one I remember.

[n/a] ALChemy › Ranger 14-Feb-06/4:02 PM Reply

Yes, but I don't think he was near New York at the time.

[n/a] raven_the_poet › ALChemy 14-Feb-06/7:18 PM Reply

thanks, he's my buddy.

[8] Glasseyez 14-Feb-06/11:06 AM Reply

This angry world nothing but a race.
change that this will be great now its good.

[n/a] raven_the_poet › Glasseyez 14-Feb-06/7:20 PM Reply

[n/a] zodiac 14-Feb-06/12:51 PM Reply

The easiest and wrongest thing to do in poetry is end every line on a full-stop - that is, with a period or strong punctuation. Your goal needs to be to write thoughts that run through the ends of the line, and that also make the grammar close to normal instead of backwards and archaic. That's not hard to do, but it takes practice.

[n/a] raven_the_poet › zodiac 14-Feb-06/7:21 PM Reply

Thanks, I'll practice a bit with that. I always thought it sounded strange.