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Escape (Sonnet) by raven_the_poet

Right now I don't feel too well. I feel like I was born in hell. My feelings are a big mistake. I cannot give until I take. I must escape this crazy world. Full of lies and pain and hurt. I must get out into fresh air. I have to leave this leaky lair. My head is throbbing full of pain. My eyes are filling up with rain. I cannot speak to save my life. Resistance is futile so swallow the knife. It's not like I can't leave this place, This angry world nothing but a race. I choose to stay and live the rest. Right now, it's nothing but a test. I'm drowning, drowning, in my tears That swallow all the hateful fears. I must give up and see the end. I can't just sit here, I can't pretend.

zodiac 14-Feb-06/12:51 PM
The easiest and wrongest thing to do in poetry is end every line on a full-stop - that is, with a period or strong punctuation. Your goal needs to be to write thoughts that run through the ends of the line, and that also make the grammar close to normal instead of backwards and archaic. That's not hard to do, but it takes practice.




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