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Life is my agony (Other) by Prince of Void
A sentence ….” Life is my agony “ But? My whys The Pain of yours All Perhaps endless requiems for our tears Terminating us in this silence of unsaid side And dreams can’t go on The Emptiness is poisoning us On last monument of awareness I am sorry …maybe I am not understandable That’s my art That’s my beauty That’s my voice in the void Right…I am wrong Can’t make me right I must be wrong I must despairs To myself Hurting my mind Take my own happiness down in nothingness It’s hard to keep this poem in your mind Because I am a sad drunk man without drinking wine Passed you as I am not seen Yep it’s really mixed up It’s chaos of beauty Things has no end met each other here Full of grammatical problems Its ocean can’t be in one empty glass

Down the ladder: Requiem for what

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10271
Posted: January 22, 2005 9:12 AM PST; Last modified: January 22, 2005 9:12 AM PST
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[5] Dovina @ 205.184.70.141 | 22-Jan-05/1:27 PM | Reply
Oh, for God's sake get over it! Have another drink. Write another poem. Go for a walk. Do something! This sitting around feeling sorry for yourself, well it's selfish and wrong. If I were on the stool next to you I'd buy you a drink.
[7] Shuushin @ 70.16.192.124 | 23-Jan-05/7:35 AM | Reply
"I must despairs" is intentional for the second to last line?

Definitely conveys a sense of hopelessness.
[n/a] Prince of Void @ 217.218.131.171 > Shuushin | 23-Jan-05/7:38 AM | Reply
yeah u are right ....thank u for ur comment
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