Re: a comment on The Happy Side of Misery by Dovina	22-May-07/10:50 AM
No, it deserves what you rank it. Forget the 0.
Re: a comment on The Happy Side of Misery by Dovina	22-May-07/10:50 AM
Only one stanza starts with "rebuke arose." Yes, I do switch to anthropromorphic thoughts about cows, and to abstract ideas, but that's what happens as working legs pull blood from the brain when cycling up a long steep hill. Thanks for commenting.
Re: a comment on The Happy Side of Misery by Dovina	22-May-07/10:46 AM
The ether out of which a rebuke arose is reaction to those bovine eyes - cows, you know - staring, wondering at audacity of the passing beast - me. Thus the cyclist reacts by preaching to the bovine congregation for holding to supposed duties of their breed, fearing the flimsy fence. Alcohol numbs the mind as do hard working legs in the weariness of afternoon. I must try to make these things more understandable. Thanks for commenting.
Re: A Future by forsaken	21-May-07/12:53 PM
Check the spelling and get rid of the duplications.
Re: The Ascent by somemorepoetry	21-May-07/12:51 PM
I hope this is about a real mountain experience. It sounds like it is, but you hedge too much. Bring it closer to what ordinary people understand, and give up some of the weird language. Sounds like a good story.
Re: a comment on A twisted Trail in Eden’s Garden by Dovina	19-May-07/10:20 AM
Tell her no, any direction but that. Cross-country biking brings greater highs - 500 miles so far, 28,000 feet climbed, and only 12% there. But thanks for your concern.
Re: My Soul Cries Out by amanda_dcosta	18-May-07/1:24 PM
Like a psalm. David's were just as honest.
Re: a comment on A twisted Trail in Eden’s Garden by Dovina	18-May-07/1:21 PM
It takes some knowledge of story to get that from the last two lines, which you seem to have.
Re: a comment on A twisted Trail in Eden’s Garden by Dovina	18-May-07/1:19 PM
But not all Adams are so easily deceived. Even cutting through their nicknames and deciphering their secrecy often leaves an Eve lonely and flowerless.
Re: a comment on Worn Ruse by drnick	16-May-07/4:18 AM
I've been acted on by worn ruses and like to think I'm ruse-hardened, but never really am.
Re: behind the banister by FreeFormFixation	16-May-07/4:12 AM
The colons in verse 1 are just silly. Do you mean hopped? The rest is pretty good, but too much repetition.
Re: garden spite by skaskowski	16-May-07/4:08 AM
Start with "I rip down the gate . . ." But for what reason you want to do this I can't see.
Re: a comment on the magic rock by nypoet22	14-May-07/3:49 AM
It doesn't clear anything up, but it's better in the edit. I think you could find a Bush quote that speaks more directly to the idea of listening to God - maybe not. He has been coy about it. Good and evil can be addressed without God, so to clarify would be to show how Bush claims to rely on what he thinks is revelation from the almighty. In a way Bush does strike a rock as Moses did in anger when God did not do what Moses wanted. That's a good analogy.
Re: Final Moon by Caducus	10-May-07/1:27 PM
Really like; "My eyes, slave wet, journeyed through yours." Been there, done that; and that's what makes a poem. Do you mean "voile"?
Re: Altitude by half.italian	10-May-07/1:09 PM
Can't see the point of this.
Re: The boomerang holiday by INTRANSIT	10-May-07/1:05 PM
It's aged and antique compared to your style, but has a nice ring and a good point. those "who" think us . . . "fallest greenest" is just silly
Re: The Wingman by John Rambo	10-May-07/1:00 PM
That isn't why. It's what you can get.
Re: Snow by MacFrantic	10-May-07/12:57 PM
The first four lines portend a good poem, but the rest only continues to portend, never getting to the snow
Re: Fraser Allonby Quidnam Cruris by Stephen Robins	10-May-07/12:55 PM
There once was a blob named Dovina, Christ, you'd have wept had you seen her, All of that weight, Squeeze into four feet and eight, She had the combined mass of Bosnia and Herzegovina. Pedaling west, halfway across Virginia tomorrow I'll crest the Appalachians just 3500 miles to go can you imagine the ruts in pavement? Where's Fraser? Haven't seen him all day.
Re: a comment on The Editor by Dovina	7-May-07/2:15 PM
A few scars to conceal - yes A transient life - yes Wasted moments won't return - yes My final tears might have already come What is this dream that's just begun? Ever with you? And how can it be beyond dreams? And beyond my tone - ok beyond pains - ok in your soul - ok What did you passed by? in the transience of life.....