| Re: hate by ts |
Heather Dee 4.179.52.168 |
11-Sep-05/6:45 AM |
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I liked the poem just not all the spelling errors
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| Re: i need a title by That One |
Heather Dee 4.179.52.168 |
11-Sep-05/6:37 AM |
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| Re: Emotionally Unavailable by horus8 |
Heather Dee 4.179.52.168 |
11-Sep-05/6:35 AM |
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I can't seem to find the right words to describe what I am feeling after reading this.............Bravo!!!!
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| Re: No More Autumn Poems (Edit) by Sasha |
Heather Dee 4.178.117.131 |
10-Sep-05/11:26 PM |
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I actually like this one. Not that this matters to you. I know that my "teenage like writting style" isn't what you would consider to be of any valute. So I highly doubt you will care to hear sugg. I might have regarding this poem
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| Re: A Song for the Street by Numen |
Heather Dee 4.178.117.131 |
10-Sep-05/11:12 PM |
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Wow-u need not say any more
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| Re: Tears and Tombstones by OnTheOtherHand |
Heather Dee 4.178.117.131 |
10-Sep-05/11:09 PM |
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Very nice although I think you could have thought of a better line for "They always want a personal account of Hell"
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| Re: For you by Montinequego |
Heather Dee 4.178.117.131 |
10-Sep-05/11:06 PM |
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I REALLY LIKE IT BUT I CANT HELP FEELING LIKE I HAVE READ SOMETHING VERY SIMILAR BEFORE
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| Re: proverbs by Montinequego |
Heather Dee 4.178.117.131 |
10-Sep-05/10:58 PM |
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| Re: Generations by Revekka |
Heather Dee 4.178.117.131 |
10-Sep-05/10:57 PM |
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| Re: Distracted by pletcgm |
7!3 219.95.9.227 |
10-Sep-05/10:47 PM |
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| Re: People by hendrimike |
7!3 219.95.9.227 |
10-Sep-05/10:41 PM |
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| Re: a comment on can't you tell me? by hendrimike |
7!3 219.95.9.227 |
10-Sep-05/10:40 PM |
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hey, i didnt think it was THAT bad.
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| Re: Be Free Ye by D. $ Fontera |
hendrimike 69.253.194.186 |
10-Sep-05/2:35 PM |
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| Re: Moving Out by jessicazee |
hendrimike 69.253.194.186 |
10-Sep-05/2:34 PM |
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| Re: I Love You (song) by TLRufener |
hendrimike 69.253.194.186 |
10-Sep-05/2:28 PM |
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this would be the longest song ever recorded. also, i don't think that the flow works when you go from: i want you to know that it's true, that i love you.
whatever...
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| Re: a comment on Rambling by terbenaw |
terbenaw 66.122.165.163 |
10-Sep-05/11:28 AM |
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"Riddled with duality, I am told
Yet I consider it differently, as it comes from my soul"
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Hmm... it kinda makes sense... hmm...
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| Re: a comment on Rambling by terbenaw |
terbenaw 66.122.165.163 |
10-Sep-05/11:26 AM |
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A few of those words actually were considered, but... I just didn't think they would work with what I was trying to do.
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| Re: a comment on Rejuvenation by Dovina |
zodiac 213.186.188.41 |
10-Sep-05/5:59 AM |
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1) To attract insects to pollinate them (not primarily to produce seeds,) but that's neither here nor there. Before you argue, the flower - that is, the colorful petaly part of the plant - is devised for bug attraction and fertilization. You can say that's a step in seed production, but then so are all of the plant's functions.
2) Pure prettiness.
3) To provide something to compare pretty girls with.
4) To give Jesus a better metaphor than "consider the coniferous trees of the field, they toil not."
5) To provide olden poets with rhymes for bower, hour, and power.
6) To make crowns and garlands out of.
I'm not even being silly yet. Seriously. At the very least, if flowers weren't pretty, comparable to beautiful women, and easily-rhymeable, you'd have written your poem about something else that was.
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| Re: a comment on Strength by Dovina |
zodiac 213.186.188.41 |
10-Sep-05/5:51 AM |
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Woah, back up.
Dovina: If I disapproved as strongly / as I think you disapprove / I would rage.
zodiac: The amount you should think she disapproves is "pretty much, but not enough to necessitate raging."
Dovina: Disapproval does not necessitate rage. Some people rage at the slightest disapproval and some never rage. The two things are not closely related.
zodiac: That's not what we're talking about. We're talking about the amount the addressee of the poem disapproves, which is not strongly enough to necessitate raging. Otherwise the addressee would be raging.
Dovina: So?
zodiac: So you'd be raging in a situation that doesn't require raging from all people who experience it. Maybe you just like raging.
Dovina: So?
zodiac: Um, I dunno.
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| Re: a comment on First Love by Dovina |
zodiac 213.186.188.41 |
10-Sep-05/5:45 AM |
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You've inspired me to imitate.
FIRST CHEESE (haiku) by zodiac
I thought my grilled-cheese
sandwich would contain a ten
dollar bill. It didn't.
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