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Distracted (Free verse) by pletcgm
Last night, was a special time. You made me laugh. You made me happy. You made me. This morning I got up. I rode my bike through the woods. For a brief two seconds, My thoughts were all on you. It was pure utopia. As my mind was all on you, Your beauty blinded me. My eyes saw nothing but you as I hit the tree. My ribs broke. The pain set in. My mind was dazed, Thinking of you.
Up the ladder: one
Down the ladder: cacoon
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.25
Weighted score: 5.029801
Overall Rank: 7348
Posted: July 17, 2005 7:47 AM PDT; Last modified: July 17, 2005 7:47 AM PDT
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Comments:
[6] Dovina @ 66.235.60.64 | 18-Jul-05/6:13 AM | Reply
Starts off well enough, but is too simply said toward the end.
[8] 7!3 @ 219.95.9.227 | 10-Sep-05/10:47 PM | Reply
lol nice.
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