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i need a title (Sonnet) by That One By the old barn
where we used to play
where we would come to just such harm
im not missing you anyway
we lived the kind of lifestyle
they could've made a realtiey show
your green face sullen while
your body was buried in the snow
the moment the knife dropped, your heart halt
another camera for the show propped, not my fault.
Up the ladder:
Mixed Messages
Down the ladder:
swallow it
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Posted: February 11, 2004 7:59 PM PST; Last modified: February 11, 2004 7:59 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.865529 Overall Rank: 10366 Comments:
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horus8 @ 24.126.116.54
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11-Feb-04/10:51 PM
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A title's the least of your worries, I'm afraid.
Third line get rid of just
Spell realitye correctly And try and make the final four lines make sense. In terms of a title - find a theme in the poem, or write a startling image. That could be used as the title.
such clever critique you make for me. How's that working out for you?
such clever critique you make for me. How's that working out for you?
Is English your first language?
no viet is
Aren't Sonnets suppose to have 10 syllables in each line?!
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