Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	12-Sep-05/3:18 PM
I apologize for assuming you were as stupid as you appeared, But you do it so convincingly. You are the Howard Stern of Poemranker. Congrats.
Re: a comment on My Big Butt by Dovina	Dovina 24.239.212.243	12-Sep-05/12:58 PM
Except for 5'3" and 24" waist, you describe me. I've been snubbed and pushed at Robinson's May 24-hour sale enough to get some idea how they think.
Re: This rage by Heather Dee	nentwined 68.232.253.122	11-Sep-05/9:08 PM
threw -> through why a comma in "free, of"? I wish I had some constructive suggestions for you, but I'm coming off a caffeine jag. It gets better in time, but I don't know how. I'm just not finding a flow, the words come across as melodramatic and not quite connected, and the situation is a bit too... generalized for me to feel any connection.
Re: a comment on My addict by Heather Dee	nentwined 68.232.253.122	11-Sep-05/9:02 PM
Some nice commentary by ALChemy. I don't really have anything to add.
Re: (e0)(af)(87e0) by nentwined	Heather Dee 4.178.123.141	11-Sep-05/8:58 PM
This is for the ignorant
Re: Lullaby by Goad	Heather Dee 4.178.123.141	11-Sep-05/8:56 PM
Strange, but I like it
Re: Smiling by Jill Stockinger	Heather Dee 4.178.123.141	11-Sep-05/8:51 PM
Very nice work, it flows rather smoothly
Re: a comment on My addict by Heather Dee	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	11-Sep-05/8:19 PM
I rarely score. Besides a score is 20 and the ranks only go to 10. How do you pronounce "mirror"? 'Cause when I say it, it doesn't even remotely rhyme with "tears". Try "terror". This poem is half finished. You've got the thoughts and feelings laid out but you need to develop an approach and style that is uniquely you and doesn't sound like every other rehab poem. The idea of the person in the mirror being a different you is a good approach but still quite cliche'. If you were to actually do a dialogue where the mirror talks back (Like "Quote the mirror. Nevermore.") then that might grab our attention. Right now what you seem to have is journal poetry. Poetry used for purposes focused on the author and not the reader. Read some Edgar Allan Poe. He'll help you find the fear, addiction, and psychological struggle you want to express.
Re: Be Free Ye by D. $ Fontera	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	11-Sep-05/7:35 PM
If Dr. Suess wrote a minstrel version of a Shakespearean play during a coke binge.
Re: Moving Out by jessicazee	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	11-Sep-05/7:21 PM
I'll give you an 8 because you can spell vacuum which is more than at least two other poets can do.
Re: The Innocence of a Child by Tainted Butterfly	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	11-Sep-05/6:34 PM
The simplicity, sweetness and flow of this poem actually works for the subject. Good ear but try approaching subjects from unexpected angles.
Re: a comment on My addict by Heather Dee	Heather Dee 4.179.54.112	11-Sep-05/6:19 PM
No, sorry to dissapoint you. So did my poem not even deserve a score?
Re: The Thief by Niphredil	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	11-Sep-05/5:11 PM
Good subject. Timings good. You don't reveal the outcome too soon.
Re: My addict by Heather Dee	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	11-Sep-05/4:46 PM
Courtney Love! Is that you?
Re: a comment on Out of a White Hole by ALChemy	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	11-Sep-05/4:36 PM
I wish I knew what abstractions you were talking about.
Re: My Big Butt by Dovina	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	11-Sep-05/3:59 PM
"36-24-36 Only if she's 5'3" A full booty is beautiful.
Re: The Ship by Tainted Butterfly	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.57	11-Sep-05/11:41 AM
Lose the fourth stanza and it would rock. By the third everyone reading this know it's about you. You pull it off at the end by making it about Everywoman/child. -7- for now.
Re: a comment on Strength by Dovina	Dovina 12.74.40.166	11-Sep-05/11:29 AM
For once your summary is accurate. However, the problem is still this: The addressee of the poem disapproves to an extent that would cause me to rage if I were in that circumstance. She, however, is so kind and self-controlled that she does not rage. It’s really that simple.
Re: a comment on Rejuvenation by Dovina	Dovina 12.74.40.166	11-Sep-05/11:20 AM
I can say that those are steps and side effects in reaching the goal of making seeds. Yes, I will say that. We’re talking about purpose and goal here. Strange how the path to a mundane goal sometimes becomes beautiful.
Re: Addendum to the Heartbreak by Miggy	zodiac 86.108.19.170	11-Sep-05/9:42 AM
This is just one of your million other identical songs that you've Shift+F7'ed every word of. Newsflash: Big words don't make you not awful. -0- PS-I'm thinking of naming my next band "Shut Up the Baby". Do you get it?