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The Ship (Free verse) by Tainted Butterfly She took to the sea
On her maiden voyage
A ship full of dreams, hopes
and insurmountable courage.
Left the safety of the harbor
where she was kept so long
Time to open up her sails
Let the wind make her strong.
Take a chance, travel the world
Survive despite a storm
Not be scared of going home
To the place that keeps her warm.
The ship reminds me
Of the girl i used to be.
Someone afraid to take sail
In that unpredictable sea.
Yet no matter how scared
Every ship must leave it's harbor.
Sail to the meaning of it's dreams
That's what ships were built for.
Up the ladder:
Forgotten Strokes
Down the ladder:
featherlight hands
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Posted: September 10, 2005 6:26 PM PDT; Last modified: September 10, 2005 6:28 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.928861 Overall Rank: 9289 Comments:
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Dan garcia-Black @ 66.159.205.57
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11-Sep-05/11:41 AM
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Lose the fourth stanza and it would rock. By the third everyone reading this know it's about you. You pull it off at the end by making it about Everywoman/child. -7- for now.
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