| Re: A Barefoot Day in the Park by Dovina |
Bethy 24.222.32.205 |
3-Oct-05/12:47 PM |
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I really like this one Dovina...
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| Re: What do u think i am! by T. Jonathron Remp |
Bethy 24.222.32.205 |
3-Oct-05/12:32 PM |
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| Re: No Aegis by wilco |
Niphredil 192.117.121.122 |
3-Oct-05/11:45 AM |
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I enjoyed reading your poem :-D it's intriguing. I think the third stanza could use a little work though.(perhaps clarification)?
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| Re: Escape by Heather Dee |
Niphredil 192.117.121.122 |
3-Oct-05/11:42 AM |
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Too many cliches for me, I'm afraid... sorry.
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| Re: a comment on Without my Glasses by Niphredil |
Niphredil 192.117.121.122 |
3-Oct-05/11:35 AM |
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does clicking on the little hyperlink thingy and reading the title count? ;-)
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| Re: a comment on Without my Glasses by Niphredil |
Niphredil 192.117.121.122 |
3-Oct-05/11:34 AM |
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If only I knew what 'being a wanna-be introvert' has to do with anything...
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| Re: a comment on Sunrise On The Slag Heap by Caducus |
Dovina 12.104.106.3 |
3-Oct-05/10:07 AM |
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All those Islamic events are such male-posturing insensitive guff. If they had any female soul, (and they do, but squelsh it in street fighting) there would be some sense of love and consideration in their celebrating.
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| Re: a comment on Sunrise On The Slag Heap by Caducus |
zodiac 212.38.134.51 |
3-Oct-05/7:42 AM |
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Really? You should. Starve yourself all day, then sit down with the neighbors to a big platter of goat smothered in goat yoghurt at sunset. Round noonish everything has to stop because everyone's low-blood-sugared and fighting in the streets. It's a beautiful time. A family time. Do you know the US Army actually slows or entirely stops its attacks and bombings at Ramadan, out of respect for the fasting-crazed, weakened and moody populace? I find that simply wonderful.
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| Re: a comment on Without my Glasses by Niphredil |
zodiac 212.38.134.51 |
3-Oct-05/7:38 AM |
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What a bind you've got me in! How do I prove I actually do live in the mideast without coming off like a hopeless wanna-be introvert? Oh, no, wait. I don't give a fuck. "Put on his glasses! He was gonna be an acrobat" is the best thing posted on this site in weeks. Its astonishing interworking parts ought to be dissected and studied.
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| Re: No Aegis by wilco |
Dovina 12.104.106.3 |
3-Oct-05/4:40 AM |
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Hey, it starts off well and then tries to make the metaphoric turn, and bogs into some Tennessee swamp. Still, I see the process and believe it will work with a little more clarity.
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| Re: a comment on Without my Glasses by Niphredil |
Dovina 12.104.106.3 |
3-Oct-05/4:35 AM |
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He always tells us that. Just grin and go on.
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| Re: a comment on Without my Glasses by Niphredil |
zodiac 212.38.134.51 |
3-Oct-05/4:32 AM |
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I'm also an English major from Cold Mountain, NC, currently living in the Great Arab Armpit.
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| Re: a comment on Sunrise On The Slag Heap by Caducus |
Dovina 12.104.106.3 |
3-Oct-05/4:32 AM |
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I don't plan on celebrating Ramadan. Godawful poetry - yes.
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| Re: a comment on Without my Glasses by Niphredil |
zodiac 212.38.134.51 |
3-Oct-05/4:31 AM |
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I'm the undiscovered corpse of Qusai Hussein, a.k.a. 'The Cultured Hussein', a.k.a. 'Little Torturepants', a.k.a. 'Bunny'.
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| Re: a comment on A Meadow, Among Other Things by Enkidu |
Dovina 12.104.106.3 |
3-Oct-05/4:29 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Without my Glasses by Niphredil |
zodiac 212.38.134.51 |
3-Oct-05/4:28 AM |
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It's the movie My Girl, starring Macaulay Culkin. 10 points if you knew that.
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| Re: a comment on Sunrise On The Slag Heap by Caducus |
zodiac 212.38.134.51 |
3-Oct-05/4:28 AM |
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If I've said this once I've said it a quadrillion times: That's because language in California has evolved to the point that normal speech is considered poetic. Hence its reams and reams of godawful poetry.
No, seriously. Happy Ramadan as of sunset tomorrow.
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| Re: a comment on A Meadow, Among Other Things by Enkidu |
zodiac 212.38.134.51 |
3-Oct-05/4:25 AM |
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Great. I just powervomited gatayyef. Happy Ramadamadan.
PS-Your first sentence is my exact description of your poetry. Check and mate.
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| Re: Without my Glasses by Niphredil |
Niphredil 192.117.121.122 |
3-Oct-05/2:41 AM |
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Heh. Where are you from, zodiac, anyway?
Dovina: the poem was written from my viewpoint, inside a dark room; the streetlight is outside and what I can see is the fuzzy light sifting through the window shade.
'streaks of white' - well, they wouldn't be seen as streaks if i had my glasses on :-)
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| Re: a comment on No Aegis by wilco |
wilco 66.61.101.130 |
2-Oct-05/8:58 PM |
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The gulls most definitely are not becoming bored with the corpses.
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