Re: A Barefoot Day in the Park by Dovina	richa 81.178.144.102	4-Oct-05/11:49 AM
Nice build up. The ending is a bit rushed. Try and work the poem to its natural conclusion through image rather than 'explaining the plot'
Re: a comment on Why I’m Homeless by Dovina	richa 81.178.144.102	4-Oct-05/11:39 AM
not the homeless. :(
Re: I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil	richa 81.178.144.102	4-Oct-05/11:27 AM
The last two lines of the poem are ridiculous. 'Coerce/there disordered feelings to verse' 'to' should be at least be 'to because it is a contraction of into.
Re: a comment on I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil	Niphredil 192.117.121.122	4-Oct-05/10:56 AM
You get bad reviews on poemranker. Of course...
Re: I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	3-Oct-05/9:54 PM
What happens when genius doesn't strike you and you don't rhyme?
Re: a comment on Without my Glasses by Niphredil	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	3-Oct-05/9:39 PM
Sounded familiar. Any movie that kills off Macaulay Culkin gets a 10 from me.
Re: I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	3-Oct-05/9:26 PM
Even Picasso said he had to learn to draw like Michelangelo before he could learn to draw like a 7 year old. The latter took him about 40 years. End in the Rhyme Poetry with it's flashy plume and flowery scent is but a simple tool to recall a precious event. Dare I say many a fool has often came and went who forgot this simple rule and so will not end in the rhyme. If you wish to write poems sublime to spand the changing seasons (For man's memory fades with time if it's not given a proper reason) Fear not that it be called a crime nor claims of poetic treason to historically rhyme in the end.
Re: Ode to the Sun by TLRufener	wilco 66.61.101.130	3-Oct-05/8:53 PM
work on it and tighten it up a bit and this isn't too bad. As it stands - 7.
Re: a comment on Escape by Heather Dee	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	3-Oct-05/8:25 PM
As are non-rhyming poets.
Re: a comment on sap's pay by ay deee	wilco 66.61.101.130	3-Oct-05/7:56 PM
Well...so you're doing a shit job for shit money...is that it...I guess I was looking for something deeper...
Re: a comment on sap's pay by ay deee	ay deee 24.255.87.123	3-Oct-05/7:51 PM
what don't you get?
Re: a comment on Without my Glasses by Niphredil	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	3-Oct-05/7:44 PM
Just for possible future use (you never know) and I hope you don't take offense but how does a heart of America boy keep himself from having his head sawed off by psychotic Islamic fundaMENTALists with rusty hunting knives in the heart of beelzebub's shit heap. I could be wrong about the beelzebub's shit heap part. If I am I appologize. I might have been thinking of West Virginia at the time.
Re: Why I’m Homeless by Dovina	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	3-Oct-05/7:26 PM
Everyone has a home. You've just got to find it.
Re: a comment on I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil	Niphredil 192.117.121.122	3-Oct-05/3:53 PM
Heh, it's not even a poem, it's more of a joke; a friend of mine found my page through a web search and informed me (indirectly) that I don't rhyme enough. So I emailed him back with this and figured it would be amusing to put it on the site. C'est tout...
Re: Idle by MacFrantic	wilco 66.61.101.130	3-Oct-05/1:37 PM
There's a song on the new Death Cab For Cutie album that this kind of reminds me of I think because of the simplicity and the signs...it's called "I will Follow You Into the Dark". This, I'm sorry tom say is not as good as that, but not a bad effort.
Re: Lost (not a poem) by Caducus	wilco 66.61.101.130	3-Oct-05/1:35 PM
This just doesn't have the...i don't know...vagueness I've come to expect from you. It didn't make me think. There's some good lines here but I think it could benefit from you MAKING it a poem.
Re: I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil	wilco 66.61.101.130	3-Oct-05/1:32 PM
Rhyming is overrated. This is a good poem about that, but it's just not that interesting...sorry.
Re: sap's pay by ay deee	wilco 66.61.101.130	3-Oct-05/1:28 PM
I just don't get it...maybe I'm thick.
Re: capital punishment by hendrimike	wilco 66.61.101.130	3-Oct-05/1:27 PM
Try adding some punctuation to make it a little easier to read. Also, proofread. "Sentenced me to", not too.
Re: Escape by Heather Dee	wilco 66.61.101.130	3-Oct-05/1:25 PM
Try saying it without the restriction of rhyme. As another recent poem states...rhyme is wholly overrated.