wilco
on Small Furies by Enkidu
4 Oct 2005, 8:14 PM
pretty good story...wouldn't surprise me if it were true. I don't like the title, though...it's almost doubling up since Satan is widely regarded to be the devil and vice versa.
I like it, funny, 8.5
I like the first 3 lines the best. I think you might like the poetry of St. John of the Cross.
I noticed in your comments to people that you said you "shun the idea that God would rather speak to us through angels and preachers than simply directly through our own hearts." Yet you quote the Bible and speak of the Summa? What is wrong with God using things or people to speak to us. . .to our hearts even? Maybe that is the way He prefers to speak to our hearts at times and at other times He does it without any of this. Maybe He choses the how and not us. It would make sense afterall that He set it up however it is He does it if He is God.
If she drives an Englishman to France, she has more power than you admit.
Does it have a plot? I must have missed it.
Thnaks, B.
So the genius stricken are the only ones allowed to rhyme but Elstupido is given a free pass to write non-rhymes. Bad poetry is bad whether it rhymes or not.
Maybe your friend just likes your rhyming poems and wanted to hear more. If you don't snub your nose at rhyme (which I don't believe you do) then why post this poem. Have any of us told you to rhyme more?
You too good a writer for such triviality.
I wonder if Rosanne Rosannadanna celebrated Ramadamadan.
Are you talking about the houseless or the apartmentless or the caveless or maybe the cardboard boxless. :P
Nice build up.
The ending is a bit rushed.
Try and work the poem to its natural conclusion through image rather than 'explaining the plot'
not the homeless. :(
The last two lines of the poem are ridiculous. 'Coerce/there disordered feelings to verse' 'to' should be at least be 'to because it is a contraction of into.
You get bad reviews on poemranker. Of course...
What happens when genius doesn't strike you and you don't rhyme?
Sounded familiar. Any movie that kills off Macaulay Culkin gets a 10 from me.
Even Picasso said he had to learn to draw like Michelangelo before he could learn to draw like a 7 year old. The latter took him about 40 years.
End in the Rhyme
Poetry
with it's flashy plume
and flowery scent
is but a simple tool
to recall a precious event.
Dare I say many a fool
has often came and went
who forgot this simple rule
and so will not end in the rhyme.
If you wish to write poems sublime
to spand the changing seasons
(For man's memory fades with time
if it's not given a proper reason)
Fear not that it be called a crime
nor claims of poetic treason
to historically rhyme in the end.
work on it and tighten it up a bit and this isn't too bad. As it stands - 7.
As are non-rhyming poets.