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Idle (Free verse) by MacFrantic I fell asleep one day
Awoke to find you there
Long fingers exploring my face
Brushing flecks of dust away
I caught up tangled words
Tripping over ways to express
My displeasure to you
But in silence remained
Stilted thoughts carving
Valleys in my head
I thought
Wondered as you pulled my shirt
From my body
Replacing it cleanly
Wondered as you removed my pants
And I could not look there
Too soon you left to go
Turning in haste from me
And I could call
I could say to swear
To loving you
But I didn't
So you turned the sign to
Sorry
We're Closed
Words that confuse me still
In front of my frozen eyes
Up the ladder:
rush hour
Down the ladder:
Little Girl Sue
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Posted: October 3, 2005 9:40 AM PDT; Last modified: October 3, 2005 9:40 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.9525743 Overall Rank: 8836 Comments:
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wilco @ 66.61.101.130
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3-Oct-05/1:37 PM
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There's a song on the new Death Cab For Cutie album that this kind of reminds me of I think because of the simplicity and the signs...it's called "I will Follow You Into the Dark". This, I'm sorry tom say is not as good as that, but not a bad effort.
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