| Re: Sensually Literary Villanelle by bwaha |
some deleted user 64.140.227.60 |
10-Dec-06/3:11 PM |
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Creative and entertaining. Excellent work.
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| Re: The blankness of his life by Nicholas Jones |
some deleted user 64.140.227.60 |
10-Dec-06/2:45 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Edna's Video Library by Edna Sweetlove |
Nicholas Jones 81.154.134.97 |
10-Dec-06/12:39 PM |
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Edna, you may well be right. However, I'm actually quite pleased you've felt the need to go to some of my old poems and say they are rubbish. You have done this to annoy me, but it has the opposite of amusing me no end.
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| Re: a comment on The blankness of his life by Nicholas Jones |
Nicholas Jones 81.154.134.97 |
10-Dec-06/11:22 AM |
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Once again, thank you. I'm afraid I'm not really very good at happy (in poetry or reality), but I may give it a go. But it may have to be happiness mixed in the melancholy knowledge that happiness is transient.
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| Re: On returning to a town where I used to live by Nicholas Jones |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.227.214 |
10-Dec-06/11:15 AM |
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If this is poetry I am a Chinaman
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| Re: Uncontrolled scribblings one luch break by Nicholas Jones |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.227.214 |
10-Dec-06/11:15 AM |
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Pretentious and ill-spelled.
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| Re: War Begins on Tuesday by Nicholas Jones |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.227.214 |
10-Dec-06/11:14 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Edna's Video Library by Edna Sweetlove |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.227.214 |
10-Dec-06/11:13 AM |
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Dear Nicky: you strike me as being a total bumhole.
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| Re: Ode to the Bun by Stephen Robins |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.227.214 |
10-Dec-06/11:12 AM |
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I think you will find there are three Ts in twattish.
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| Re: California triolets by zodiac |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.227.214 |
10-Dec-06/11:10 AM |
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I thought it said "California toilets" Sorry. It would have been better thus.
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| Re: California triolets by zodiac |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.227.214 |
10-Dec-06/11:10 AM |
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I thought it said "California toilets" Sorry. It would have been better thus.
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| Re: From pains inside by Prince of Void |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
10-Dec-06/10:40 AM |
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| Re: Ode to the Bun by Stephen Robins |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
10-Dec-06/10:38 AM |
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How can your face be like a fat isoceles triangle? Is it trying to imitate Fraser's legs?
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| Re: a comment on She dreams by amanda_dcosta |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
10-Dec-06/10:35 AM |
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That's the nicest thing you've said in years
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| Re: Self Portrait by Dovina |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
10-Dec-06/10:34 AM |
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| Re: The blankness of his life by Nicholas Jones |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
10-Dec-06/10:29 AM |
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This simply has to be favourited.
Don't think you need the 'what?' at the start of line three. Other than that, wonderful. Can you please write something happy though?
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| Re: Cloche. by howl |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
10-Dec-06/10:28 AM |
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This is very good indeed. A couple too many instances of 'the' for my taste.
A subway, a tram and a policeman with a torch? Where are you?
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| Re: Light in the Darkness by grumpycrafter |
some deleted user 64.140.228.139 |
10-Dec-06/5:34 AM |
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This is not bad, although I think you could make the last stanza stronger. For one thing, the rest of the poem tells us you're in the darkness, so you don't need to repeat darkness twice because we allready know that's what your trying to climb out of.
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| Re: The Day Before Christmas by grumpycrafter |
some deleted user 64.140.228.139 |
10-Dec-06/5:20 AM |
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| Re: Particle Deceleration by MacFrantic |
some deleted user 64.140.228.139 |
10-Dec-06/5:17 AM |
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This is good--great imagery.
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