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The blankness of his life (Free verse) by Nicholas Jones
the blankness of his life leads him to
seek out experiences that are more â
what? extreme? ludicrous? challenging? â
We laugh â he doesnât even know!
Not even that. He is trying â
or he thinks he is trying â to do something
wonderful. Or at least, unusual. Or, with luck,
just better than despair.
But though the street is wet and the rain
at a shallow angle and the wind
thinks about destroying the city â
conditions have deteriorated badly and
he is not prepared for them â
he has not found it. Because the winter
is not cold enough. He seeks this thing, this
extremity, that he doesnât know,
but the winter is too warm for him.
He hasnât discovered this. He does not know
and he cannot imagine. And so the
blankness of his life remains unaffected by
the interesting? the bizarre? the confused? the remarkable?
the absence of life?
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Overall Rank: 4300
Posted: December 10, 2006 4:50 AM PST; Last modified: December 10, 2006 4:50 AM PST
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Don't think you need the 'what?' at the start of line three. Other than that, wonderful. Can you please write something happy though?