Re: Lovers leave their marks by scitz	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	27-Dec-20/3:30 PM
grammar needs fixing, tenses of verbs are not matching subjects, annoying, also too many cliches- and some jarring lines, like "Some men are pathetic, wearing emotional cosmetic". Some strong emotions are captured, worth reworking.
Re: First Love by Mr Pig	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	27-Dec-20/3:26 PM
I do not see how "insular" fits. Liked the idea of the person being created by the lover the way a sculptor (or in this case sculptress) creates a ceramic piece. And carrying it through, where like a piece of terracotta, it crumbles into nothing.
Re: Family Portrait by Mr Pig	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	27-Dec-20/3:21 PM
I'd call it a narrative poem-- captures the story really well--poignant. I enjoyed the irony in the last 4 lines.
Re: for John by pete	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	26-Dec-20/6:24 PM
some good lines, a little too disjointed for me. Liked sections on trying to reach nirvana but not able to- guess the point is armageddon coming, enjoyed parts.
Re: protest chant by nypoet22	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	26-Dec-20/6:19 PM
Enjoyed this! Pithy. Might even say "meaty"!
Re: protest chant by nypoet22	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	26-Dec-20/6:19 PM
Enjoyed this! Pithy. Might even say "meaty"!
Re: bitrot by nentwined	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	26-Dec-20/6:17 PM
bothered by line "bits moan"- rest is really good!
Re: Year of the Cucumber by Dovina	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	26-Dec-20/6:15 PM
Enjoyed the thought and imagery. Loved the last line.
Re: Fragmental by Bill Z Bub	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	26-Dec-20/6:12 PM
Too opaque.
Re: Lovesick by impert&ent	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	26-Dec-20/6:11 PM
Cute!
Re: Firewoman by Richard	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	26-Dec-20/6:09 PM
Mixing modern language with words like "ere" and "paltry" makes this less strong. The last line is very strong.
Re: Paedophile at st catherine's by Mona Lisa	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	26-Dec-20/9:45 AM
Drawers full not draws. Some very good lines.
Re: The Land of Back-to-Front by [mojo]	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	22-Dec-20/6:09 PM
Enjoyed it!
Re: Little Miss Ogyny by [mojo]	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	22-Dec-20/6:01 PM
Clever!
Re: Spit Factor by [mojo]	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	22-Dec-20/5:59 PM
Humorous! Like your last line!
Re: Why You All Suck by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	22-Dec-20/5:57 PM
made me laugh!
Re: Queen Of The Ring by baphomet	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	22-Dec-20/5:25 PM
Annoying you are using Hsiwej = Jewish backwards Also, so many spelling errors get annoying to read
Re: you turned me evil by baphomet	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	22-Dec-20/5:09 PM
Not bad!
Re: Sold by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	22-Dec-20/5:08 PM
I found this uninspired
Re: The benefit of being realistic by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	22-Dec-20/5:07 PM
Compact, good!