poemranker ::Sold by Jeremi B. Handrinos

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Free verse № 98463

Sold

Member since 2003 · Posted 23 Apr 2004 · 4 comments

The sign had been there for quite a while before I realized that you were not. A reminder that held me fixed in a running car with no place to go, but around the block. I wondered, briefly, if I'd thought you were joking when you said "You'll wake up one day and find that I've moved on." I was a fool to think we had the time to think. There is nothing as side-less as time. There is nothing further from the truth; Then the way I need to miss you until I can need nothing, but the distance.

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[9] Shuushin 24-Apr-04/10:10 AM Reply
Nice.
[9] deleted user 24-Apr-04/10:49 AM Reply
Why not lose the ; after "truth" and change "Then" to "Than" Still a bit clumbsy. Other than that, it's very nice.
[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos › deleted user 24-Apr-04/11:32 PM Reply
Good point, I'll meet you half way.
[2] Jill Stockinger 22-Dec-20/5:08 PM Reply
I found this uninspired