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Sold (Free verse) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
The sign had been there for quite a while before I realized that you were not. A reminder that held me fixed in a running car with no place to go, but around the block. I wondered, briefly, if I'd thought you were joking when you said "You'll wake up one day and find that I've moved on." I was a fool to think we had the time to think. There is nothing as side-less as time. There is nothing further from the truth; Then the way I need to miss you until I can need nothing, but the distance.

Down the ladder: Brighter

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.818182
Weighted score: 5.909091
Overall Rank: 1417
Posted: April 23, 2004 8:48 PM PDT; Last modified: April 23, 2004 8:48 PM PDT
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[9] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 24-Apr-04/10:10 AM | Reply
Nice.
[9] deleted user @ 68.66.196.168 | 24-Apr-04/10:49 AM | Reply
Why not lose the ; after "truth" and change "Then" to "Than" Still a bit clumbsy. Other than that, it's very nice.
[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 66.229.187.185 > deleted user | 24-Apr-04/11:32 PM | Reply
Good point, I'll meet you half way.
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