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Free verse № 23448

arise

Member since 2002 · Posted 2 Nov 2002 · 10 comments

Rising from odd years sleep, I am told to turn and await the coming. Folding hands from habit, facing a northern sky, reaching beyond my horizon, across the waters, out of the boat, I turn and wait. Thunder is a counting distance away from the light, So I count the seconds to the minute to the hour of an uncertain time. Closing my eyes, banishing thought, wearing a cloak, I count. Through the stillness in between, poised and ready, It is my turn to keep watch. Handing the lantern to the child on my right, lifting the linen to the winds, straining the salt from the waters, I keep an eyeful watch. Once my feet traced circles in the sand. Twice I let drop my guard. Three times I was given a gift. Four strokes left my heart in hand. Five fingers will ring the bell, as I ready my heart, watching, counting, waiting for the promise.

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[9] <{Baba^Yaga}> 4-Nov-02/1:08 AM Reply
very wiccan and savy. here's a 9.
visually pleasing and overall laden with hope and mystery in a timeless sorta way.9.
[n/a] daniella › <{Baba^Yaga}> 4-Nov-02/6:48 AM Reply
no no no... not wiccan. not pagan. pure Christ through and through. savvy in His word! thanks for showing me He permeates though!
[8] <~> 4-Nov-02/8:39 AM Reply
finally! a poem that both tempts and delivers! nice effort.
[n/a] daniella › <~> 18-Nov-02/6:30 PM Reply
i love this praise!
[9] INTRANSIT 4-Nov-02/11:56 AM Reply
Well assembled too, I might add. Nothing like a boost in the right direction, either.
[7] god'swife 4-Nov-02/2:35 PM Reply
i love the last stanza, a familiar melancholia. You reminded me of something long forgotten, I will go and post it now.
[n/a] daniella › god'swife 4-Nov-02/6:24 PM Reply
will definitely go and peer into "yours" to read up!
[8] Christof 11-Nov-02/2:22 AM Reply
Something very mystic about this - a religious impulse I don't share, but which is impressive.
[n/a] daniella › Christof 16-Nov-02/8:40 PM Reply
thank you very.
[8] Felzpoet 18-May-03/6:17 PM Reply
Great poem really touching