Poemranker [Poem: Year of the Cucumber] [by Dovina] Thu Nov 21 11:18:59 PST 2024

Year of the Cucumber (Free verse) by Dovina

If only I were a cucumber no brain to think no need for thought feel with feet in soil water and mulch absorb the sun mix with carbon wallah – food no way to wander no wanderlust just live where planted grow blooms in season seeds for children provide their food in a luscious green shroud then die without fear born without crying

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5900

Posted: April 21, 2020 10:45 AM PDT; Last modified: April 21, 2020 10:45 AM PDT
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[7] nentwined @ ::1 | 23-Apr-20/3:07 PM | Reply

I stumbled a little at "feel"/"feel with"... flows better without to me. (why wallah vs. voila? If you were a cucumber? :) )

"no wanderlust" might be "no lust for wander"?

More food for thought than I expected.

[n/a] Dovina @ ::1 > nentwined | 23-Apr-20/3:20 PM | Reply

Wallah is an Arabic word similar to the French Voila.
cucumber - food - food for thought.

[9] Jill Stockinger @ 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1 | 26-Dec-20/6:15 PM | Reply

Enjoyed the thought and imagery. Loved the last line.

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