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Year of the Cucumber (Free verse) by Dovina
If only I were a cucumber no brain to think no need for thought feel with feet in soil water and mulch absorb the sun mix with carbon wallah – food no way to wander no wanderlust just live where planted grow blooms in season seeds for children provide their food in a luscious green shroud then die without fear born without crying

Up the ladder: The dumping world
Down the ladder: Getting Burned

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 5.094852
Overall Rank: 6145
Posted: April 21, 2020 10:45 AM PDT; Last modified: April 21, 2020 10:45 AM PDT
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[7] nentwined @ ::1 | 23-Apr-20/3:07 PM | Reply
I stumbled a little at "feel"/"feel with"... flows better without to me. (why wallah vs. voila? If you were a cucumber? :) )

"no wanderlust" might be "no lust for wander"?

More food for thought than I expected.
[n/a] Dovina @ ::1 > nentwined | 23-Apr-20/3:20 PM | Reply
Wallah is an Arabic word similar to the French Voila.
cucumber - food - food for thought.
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