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Spit Factor (Free verse) by [mojo] What exactly would you say,
If for no reason at all
I spat full in your face?
Or if I span the wheel on the motorway
And killed us all, for the hell of it,
Just because I was bored?
What would your expression be,
If, as we were walking along
In the blustery wind, by the choppy sea,
I just pushed...no SHOVED...yes really shoved you in?
What if anything would you actually do,
If I just yelled out "FUCK, BOLLOCKS, SHIT!"
In the middle of a super-market queue?
Because, quite frankly, sometimes
I want to do these things
And more. If you knew
How curious I was,
You'd be worried too.
It worries me.
Up the ladder:
a fiction
Down the ladder:
Keeper of Faces
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.75
Posted: April 15, 2005 9:01 AM PDT; Last modified: April 15, 2005 9:01 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.089402 Overall Rank: 6335 Comments:
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Humorous! Like your last line!
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If for no reason at all
I spat full in your face?"
In every scenario, I'd return the favor, save the death one, because well, I'd be dead. I think the last verse needs rethought entirely. The ending left me sourly disappointed. I thought you'd quite a large nut sack, until the last two lines in which apparently you spunked like never before, and lost them.
-8-, but I think a rewrite of the entire last verse would make this better.
<3 Jason