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Spit Factor

by [mojo]

Member since 2002 · Posted 15 Apr 2005 · 3 comments

What exactly would you say, If for no reason at all I spat full in your face? Or if I span the wheel on the motorway And killed us all, for the hell of it, Just because I was bored? What would your expression be, If, as we were walking along In the blustery wind, by the choppy sea, I just pushed...no SHOVED...yes really shoved you in? What if anything would you actually do, If I just yelled out "FUCK, BOLLOCKS, SHIT!" In the middle of a super-market queue? Because, quite frankly, sometimes I want to do these things And more. If you knew How curious I was, You'd be worried too. It worries me.

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[8] thepinkbunnyofdoom 15-Apr-05/9:49 AM Reply
"What exactly would you say,
If for no reason at all
I spat full in your face?"

In every scenario, I'd return the favor, save the death one, because well, I'd be dead. I think the last verse needs rethought entirely. The ending left me sourly disappointed. I thought you'd quite a large nut sack, until the last two lines in which apparently you spunked like never before, and lost them.

-8-, but I think a rewrite of the entire last verse would make this better.

<3 Jason
[8] zodiac 15-Apr-05/10:55 PM Reply
Do you ever want to pull your cock out in public? This is the poem for you: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=94210
[7] Jill Stockinger 22-Dec-20/5:59 PM Reply
Humorous! Like your last line!