Re: Arm 'n' headin (Mr.Mexicacco) by suprembeaner	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	22-Dec-20/5:06 PM
Annoying
Re: There was . . . by baphomet	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	22-Dec-20/5:05 PM
(stampede of cattle, not stamped of cattle) Cannot conceive of how a wave "suede"s- swayed? What? Oversized- one word- aftertaste, one word. Do your proofreading before submitting. " a cornucopia" not an cornucopia. "What we'll do tomorrow? Not "What will do". Too many errors detracted from enjoying the poem.
Re: A "sirius"makeover by The_Third_Isis	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	22-Dec-20/5:00 PM
Annoyed by so many misspellings. If they were deliberate, they were not useful. Some interesting ideas, imagery
Re: Days of Silence (197-392) by impert&ent	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	22-Dec-20/4:58 PM
Reads like headlines but it gripped me all the way through. Love how "Tom" lines and "Mary" are interspersed here and there. You would not think such a poem would work but I think it does! Enjoyed this! Remembered reading some of these...it engaged my thought, had some humor, did make me think! Enjoyable.
Re: Ghost by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	22-Dec-20/4:50 PM
Some beautiful lines, good ending, like how you carry the idea throughout the poem, the speaker believing the person who killed herself is so much better than he is, right to a very bitter end.....
Re: Rock of the Earth by ingwa	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	22-Dec-20/4:46 PM
Some good lines, I like the idea captured. No comma after "Hunts gone by" I think- some clunky lines: "experiences, good and bad"- some very good lines: "sing to my soul of ages gone by" and "Ageless you stand, tall and proud/ Lichen grows upon your surfaces"; uneven rhyme scheme does not help (1st and 4th lines in first stanza, 3rd and 4th lines in 3rd stanza, no rhyme in last stanza.
Re: Rock of the Earth by ingwa	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	22-Dec-20/4:46 PM
Some good lines, I like the idea captured. No comma after "Hunts gone by" I think- some clunky lines: "experiences, good and bad"- some very good lines: "sing to my soul of ages gone by" and "Ageless you stand, tall and proud/ Lichen grows upon your surfaces"; uneven rhyme scheme does not help (1st and 4th lines in first stanza, 3rd and 4th lines in 3rd stanza, no rhyme in last stanza.
Re: A FERAL PHASE FOR THE POET by daggatolar	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	22-Dec-20/4:39 PM
The word I think is perpetuity, not perpetuality-- if trying to coin a new word, unnecessary, annoying- some good lines-
Re: Prepropositioned pudding by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	22-Dec-20/4:35 PM
Very cute!
Re: Horror Film by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	22-Dec-20/4:35 PM
Well written, sadness staining every line...
Re: Beah Richards by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	22-Dec-20/4:34 PM
Lovely
Re: Devilution by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	22-Dec-20/4:33 PM
Cutesy. Villanelles are not easy...
Re: Weened by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	22-Dec-20/4:32 PM
Some good lines, a TON of anger...
Re: a comment on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	Dovina 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	21-Dec-20/7:01 PM
Thanks Jill, nice to find someone here with nentwined and me after too long silence. I hope you stay awhile.
Re: The Song I Miss by Miggy	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	21-Dec-20/6:44 PM
One line sticks out as not fitting the song, I think: disliked "Yet since this rotted bad"--Liked all the rest!
Re: Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	21-Dec-20/6:41 PM
well written, great imagery
Re: appropriation by nentwined	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	21-Dec-20/6:40 PM
lovely!
Re: From Then Till Now by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	21-Dec-20/6:35 PM
Liked it! Sadly, relate to it...
Re: The Pig Roast by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	21-Dec-20/6:32 PM
Intense. Moving. Powerful description, strong ending.
Re: Beached (Or how I learned to give up the day) by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	21-Dec-20/6:30 PM
LOVED the line: "The sun had just yoked"- original and excellent! Some seemed a little lackluster: the lines"whales were sick too" and a little trite: "I saw no foot-steps home"--The first two stanzas are fresh and hardhitting. Rest of poem did not match that power.