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A "sirius"makeover (Free verse) by The_Third_Isis
This LOVE goes back to antiquity You ended my life and yours a repeated phropesy. Our blood merged and sealead a forever heresy. This gene has passed down from generation to resurection- ancient prayers long forgoten, come to mind as i look at you.. the symbol of a petroglyphed eye this time, around you are again the sacred sirian number 8. I recall five and eight equals tweelve. One and twoo equal three trinity. I'am the third Isis, with out the need of itermediaris we still communicate with our inner mind, third eye principle. united our cosmic identity join us as one, sirian -conotation a "Lion Family" Dogma youve killed me, now you healed me. Ive been on the dark side of the moon too long. Born out of a fenomenal union, your father a bird headed god. You infant survivor of tribulations air/water/fire. Enlightened Bast/twin of Horus you now slumber on Isis lap. This gravitational pull, astronomic souls of old. Our sarcofogus blessed with starcore memories. I as before ions ago promise you my love. This is a promise sealed with forever, and ever my love,my twin, my sun..my moon...my me my you.

Up the ladder: Present, tense
Down the ladder: The Lion and the worm.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.714286
Weighted score: 5.192101
Overall Rank: 4649
Posted: November 21, 2003 11:59 PM PST; Last modified: November 21, 2003 11:59 PM PST
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[n/a] The_Third_Isis @ 24.126.116.54 | 22-Nov-03/4:38 PM | Reply
I agree, I try to do this on my own.But editing from you is a plus love.Entonces
[8] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.169.26 | 23-Nov-03/7:01 AM | Reply
looks like your family has a potent poet gene. Overall, blessed with eight.
[n/a] The_Third_Isis @ 24.126.116.54 | 23-Nov-03/9:21 PM | Reply
S.Dreamer thank you for the eight no pun intended.The gene thing yep, art and music too.Horus and baphomet are unique loving and good lookers. 15 years apart but alot alike."Nothing great will ever be achieved without great men.And men are great only if they are determined to be so.{charles De Gaulle} Horus was composing poetry at five, loved to sing,and could outread any of he's friends. Baphomet has an ear for languages' is very creative,and also loves music.So Xcuse me whyle I kiss the sky. I need to better my writting but you should see my poems. En espanol.Que suenescon creciones de Dali, mi amigo, ciao. The third
[n/a] Don-Quixote @ 204.31.166.172 > The_Third_Isis | 24-Nov-03/7:41 PM | Reply
h8's music? pretty good.. but his harmonica tunes? a reason to kill.

I have read all your poems, voted on them aswell, but didn't comment till this one- not sure why.

A writer improves his/her skill always- its constant. (but then again, some others live in denial? or quit poetry and start a 2000 pg. rose-diary)

En espanol? anglais, francaise et wallon je comprenez- pas espanol (and im very bad at reading/writing french or walloon.. speaking french? np. walloon? a mouthful to say the least.)
[7] Freethinker1602 @ 68.48.30.210 | 29-Nov-03/9:16 PM | Reply
kudos... seemed to have some sort of meter, almost. good composition and nice work on the structure ... I liked the lip biting kiss comment
[6] Jill Stockinger @ 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1 | 22-Dec-20/5:00 PM | Reply
Annoyed by so many misspellings. If they were deliberate, they were not useful. Some interesting ideas, imagery
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