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Horror Film (Free verse) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
Often, late at night, they will come out, and flash, pop, shatter with limo chatter. I might be working the corner and wave; Blond juts out of sunroof, topless, vomits. Orange County tattooed on her teeth and palms I miss junk, it would be a time like this to shoot. Tonight, I'm off, I'm writing about a one eyed pimp Wheel chair knight of no table -- smoking blunt. Gathering the harem of broken product & Fat bottomed carriers, wigged, painted, dull. City life burns hotter than hidden stars bother As I look up, I only see a line of planes. Man, what I wouldn't give to be with you now Michelle, I'm sorry I lied -- Orpheus died. And as I recall my first love through poem and twisted scenery, trash, this cracked dream. Simultaneously, another film plays in my mind; Us Making love behind the Korean church in your Mercury. Now I pen mad panoramic visions and chaos & Nova, now I am really lost, a new vampire. Ignotum per ignotious Something dead stalking memory. Something dead finding surrogates Something altogether frightening.

Down the ladder: The Silent Musing

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.125
Weighted score: 5.302559
Overall Rank: 3618
Posted: May 27, 2004 12:05 PM PDT; Last modified: May 27, 2004 12:05 PM PDT
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[10] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.171.203 | 27-May-04/2:09 PM | Reply
Smashin. Only one thing leaves me wondering:

"Ignotum per ignotious"

What exactly does that mean? I have no knowledge of latin. Other than that, blessed with ten.
[10] zodiac @ 65.161.41.48 | 27-May-04/10:21 PM | Reply
One of your best in a while.

"Wheel chair knight of no table" needs work. I get it now, and would've had an easier time if you'd made wheelchair one word. Maybe hyphenate "knight-of-no-table" as well. Maybe not.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 > zodiac | 27-May-04/10:30 PM | Reply
No, you're right -- you know me, first drafts are always B+.
The art of proper grammar is still foreign to me, but I'm slightly improving.
[10] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.163.155 | 28-May-04/1:18 AM | Reply
I can tell that I'm being ignored. You haven't even ridiculed me for my question, not even a reply with a elongated and false translation to make me the punchline of a joke. Not even a blasted "bow'ls".

Have I done something to deserve being tagged as an invisible and horribly grotesque untouchable? I have a gut feeling that I won't get a reply to my question wrapped in childish whining. But anyway, I figure voicing my curiousity is a needed urge, the side-effect of some dismal disease that I endure daily.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 163.1.146.126 > SupremeDreamer | 28-May-04/2:02 AM | Reply
"I figure voicing my curiousity is a needed urge"

Your mouth is a cornucopia of plums.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.130.62.63 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 28-May-04/11:32 AM | Reply
And he would know because he's the Cardinal Of Cornucopia.

Where do fat people live?


Rotunda.

Thank you folks, I'm here twice a day.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.130.62.63 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 28-May-04/11:33 AM | Reply
(I had to throw that in since today was the first day I ever sat down and split my pants in the ass.)
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