Re: Hurt by Cougarchic	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:09 PM
very nice. A good read.
Re: The Critical and His Horse by MacFrantic	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:11 PM
I liked the third line. Need an ending.
Re: The Masonic Underling & the 33 degree by horus8	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:12 PM
Not bad, needs a message? Ya think?
Re: Prometheus sang for vultures by horus8	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:13 PM
Short and to the point. Not suttle enough. Tone it down and add to it.
Re: 9/11 by dougsoderstrom	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:37 PM
Very insightful words. My oldest son that is 25 now has been to Iraq twice now. God Bless him. I like this poem very much. Good description.
Re: Life As a Boat by dougsoderstrom	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:37 PM
Interesting. Waves of time is cool.
Re: A Friend in the Night by Joi	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:54 PM
I love this one! It says so much.
Re: Scurvey by horus8	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:58 PM
I didn't care for your wording in this one. Keep trying different styles.
Re: Fireworks on an Open Sky by capachijim	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:58 PM
Nice feel to this Haiku. Beatiful thought it brings to me. Thanks.
Re: The Lordy only knows why tornados have no nose by Bachus	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:59 PM
ok?
Re: Life As a Boat by dougsoderstrom	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:59 PM
very crisp. I liked it.
Re: Scurvey by horus8	Joi 207.119.185.153	27-Aug-07/12:00 AM
Not good in my opinion.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 63.127.193.79	27-Aug-07/4:57 AM
Thanks INTRANSIT, I suppose you are reffering to the use of "they" and "how" in the left column. I will try to work on it and any suggestions would be welcome. Thanks for the vote and critique--there's not much of that happening on this site these days.
Re: The Dark Poet by Dovina	INTRANSIT 65.29.52.204	27-Aug-07/6:50 AM
More about the "happy peril in a runaway colt"- please. I also think it's too straight/technical/cold.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 65.29.52.204	27-Aug-07/9:23 AM
There you go.
Re: The Dark Poet by Dovina	Ranger 86.131.46.83	27-Aug-07/1:56 PM
To make it topical, I suggest the following alternative finale: "for gifts like these they call him drnick".
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 86.131.46.83	27-Aug-07/2:04 PM
This moves like one of my favourite Dylan Thomas poems ('I dreamed my genesis'), and it's beautifully lyrical. Unlike DT it's not at all dramatic, and at first it felt a little empty content-wise - but as I read it gets more effective; stunning but bleak. You're creating some wonderful poems right now -9-
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 86.131.46.83	27-Aug-07/2:08 PM
Brilliant
Re: You Have It Backwards by LilMsLadyPoet	Ranger 86.152.54.236	27-Aug-07/2:14 PM
Why have you removed all your poemes?
Re: Show me the way by Joi	Dovina 12.72.42.250	28-Aug-07/1:35 PM
Do you read Gerald Manley Hopkins? He's pretty Christian for a Jesuit. But he elaborates in such detail it becomes finally obstacle, rather than assistance. I think you do the opposite, handing us generalities without much specific life-gouging. I'd rather see you "tossed" than hear you say you are tossed, and see these "free" things the Lord gives you.