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on the way things are goin' by irishfolksuicide
20 Nov 2004, 12:23 AM
lol funny
like the richness of ur poems..
need more writers like you.
My eyes
Came across your poem
I wont read this anymore
I can't read this anymore
4.
Clustered cliches cause crainial concussions. Bah! My freakin head! 5.
a large number of people should do less answering themselves..perhaps some people need to do it more.
very classic
i think the point of the last line was to rhyme? dunno. even that,... lol funny
interesting poem... hope your other poems are better! :)
it was not bad.
mamamia... lol that was good!
Transvestites selling lube do not a maiden make.
i think you have too many dots... it interferes with the other dots, don't u think? lol
It's got a cleverly abstract quality.
Like something I would write.
Except not quite splendidly idiotic.
I have a feeling it was written out of boredom and absolute mindlessness.
blindwriter
on the absent-minded walk on the proverbial mountainside of nothingness + my mother's old tampons by skaskowski
20 Nov 2004, 3:33 AM
i am disgraced by posting here.
i'm sure you didn't mean this as intelligence at all.
there is a classification of poetry that is so entirely abstract in its imagery that it is clever. However, that form of poeticism is carefully written. Yours is obviously a piece of mockery. But I like it.
Quite an enchanting narrative.
The scenery is beautiful. Your line-division, masterfully utilized.
Nice work.
Makes little sense in the end...
However, your thought pattern is clever.
The rhyming scheme is cute, but the rhythm leaves a little to be desired.