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the way things are goin'

Member since 2002 · Posted 2 Oct 2003 · 7 comments

Dry lands day, so fast, the shadows trickle. Masked to a single; the bull moo and blue sky. All cracked skulls buried a single sheet deep. Cracked glasses seep, and pigs new-born fry.

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[n/a] irishfolksuicide 2-Oct-03/7:34 AM Reply

Ten witnesses; one, to stretch the ten seconds.

It is reckoned ten leaps, to let a long drag

[8] INTRANSIT 2-Oct-03/7:42 AM Reply

bull moo- seems a bit comical. good thought provoker.

[9] horus8 2-Oct-03/8:03 AM Reply

Skill.

[8] tadpole 2-Oct-03/12:40 PM Reply

liked the "bull moo." Maybe use another word instead of "cracked" twice

[8] J.B. Manning 2-Oct-03/3:22 PM Reply

short and sweet

[n/a] Christof 10-Oct-03/2:43 AM Reply

I like the last line a lot, but 'bull-mo- just sounds wrong - I think you want something a little more guttural, less weak.

[7] 7!3 20-Nov-04/12:23 AM Reply

lol funny