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Outhouse (Haiku) by newagepoet2000 flowers grow happily
as the feces seeps away
did you shit today?
Up the ladder:
Para Sa Aking Sinta
Down the ladder:
Thong Thoo
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.7169812
Posted: November 14, 2003 9:39 AM PST; Last modified: November 14, 2003 9:39 AM PSTWeighted score: 3.7169821 Overall Rank: 13541 Comments:
what a load of shit
Hmmmm. stinky, and I'm annoyed at the waste of the precious posting space (not being blessed with multiple user names - and I'm not saying you are either, and besides, it's perfectly legal).
-5- cuz it's the closest thing to a real haiku anyone has posted here in a while (at least it's about nature).
why!?
feces? Faeces surely, unless you're a dammed yank.
NO friggin' way this is the worst of THIS site!!! I'm goin ta git shit-feced.
kill yourself, do it twice
Not yet, but when I do? I won't be because of you.
thats funny!!!! i love it!! it's so crazy it might work!!!
Its kinda funny, in a grotesque immature kind of way
There is an art to crude imagry. This doesn't cut it.
[from The Banned Diaries Of Sir Arthur Weatherby-Browne]
Alone in the yard, beyond the last of the wilting Azaleas, lies The Outhouse. A place of solitude, and of shame; see how it basks in its filth, taunting me with its soiled bounty. How many loved-ones have fallen there? Swallowed whole by its endless hunger for the browne? I'm wearing pyjamas now. Sieve in hand - the Earth will not claim this treasure! I lower my pants. And lay dung... Trapped in the sieve! Writhing like a worm on a hook! My darling! I carry the beloved filtrate back to the bedchamber, there to bathe it, and clothe it in silk. But kicking and screaming, ever tethered to an old man's beard - that is no life for a crumbling stool! Hands clasped in prayer, and weeping, I watch it ride off in its chariot. Black against the setting sun. Wrapped in a veil.
liked it, made me smile
You know this shit you have posted has a stench more vile than any that comes out of my own or anybody else's rectum.
can u say barf?
Hmmm interesting thoughts, bet I know where you were when you thought of this one.................
i think the point of the last line was to rhyme? dunno. even that,... lol funny
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blessed with 4.
Oh, and not to be rude.. but your nick makes mine seem smashin, really- I can't keep from giggling everytime I read "new age poet" since the first thought that pops up in my head is: "whats that? virgin hippies meet MDMA+pantheism?"
No offense intended, just being liberal with my opinion.