| Re: Easter Egg Hunt by Dovina |
Skamper 58.171.149.205 |
29-Nov-07/3:32 AM |
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I wish I could understand this, but the language is out of my reach. :(
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| Re: In the berth by INTRANSIT |
Dental Panic 87.209.75.3 |
29-Nov-07/5:57 AM |
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the sound effects make it an infant thing - don't know if that's intentional. It's wasted on me, that's for sure.
I like the cat though. prrrr prrrrrrrrrrr
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| Re: Easter Egg Hunt by Dovina |
Dental Panic 87.209.75.3 |
29-Nov-07/6:14 AM |
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While freestrolling through comments here and there, I read a line of yours, going something like: did I see you in Kansas, staring at daisies?
Maybe you should try to write more by accident - this is one big deliberate bulk.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
sliver 209.248.115.33 |
29-Nov-07/8:17 PM |
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Again,I must say. Well done!
This should be in the top ten
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| Re: Engine Braking by INTRANSIT |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
1-Dec-07/10:08 PM |
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Not bad, good imagery, puts me there in the conductor chair (?)... but leaves me a little confused about why I'm reading this.
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| Re: Uptown spell! by liya |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
1-Dec-07/10:18 PM |
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I'm sorry for the shabby rating
but this poem is just not my thing
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| Re: A bereaved search by liya |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
1-Dec-07/10:20 PM |
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Good rhyming, and I guess form counts for something.
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| Re: Easter Egg Hunt by Dovina |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
1-Dec-07/10:26 PM |
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So what you're saying is that God looks down on the brightest of humans like we look down on rotary telephones?
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| Re: Over the Horizon by Miggy |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
1-Dec-07/10:27 PM |
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Sounds like a country song, I hate country songs.
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| Re: Before Dawn by Christof |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
1-Dec-07/10:30 PM |
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I'm sure there are more accurate adjectives for a teenage boy's bedsheets, but 9 for you.
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| Re: Missing - You by Skamper |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
1-Dec-07/10:34 PM |
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| Re: Home coming of her love by Jessina |
amanda_dcosta 61.17.22.231 |
2-Dec-07/10:02 AM |
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Hmmm... Jessina, Here are a few things I would take note of.... avoiding the 'ing' form of the words, like beginning with Sighing.
For eg. ... just a suggestion,
She sighs profoundly and saunters
Down the corridor of her chamber.
Her movement was slow
Like a weary itinerant.
Lost in a world of sheeer gloom,
She lounges restively on stairs so plume
Quivers in hoary morn
And clinches her ruddy coverlet.
There seems to be a slight conflict in tenses.... for which you have to be careful about. But, nice choice of words.
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| Re: Home coming of her love by Jessina |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
2-Dec-07/1:29 PM |
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Lately, thanks to Superbad, anytime I see the word "coming" I'm brought to that conversation in the bar with those silly cops and McLovin. Just wanted to share, and doesn't Poemranker remind you a little bit of show in tell back in elementary school?
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| Re: Sunset Beach by amanda_dcosta |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
2-Dec-07/1:35 PM |
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Nice flow, the first line doesn't work for me though, same goes for the last stanza...
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| Re: Travails of one decade by Prince of Void |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
3-Dec-07/12:17 AM |
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Less telling and more showing. I don't really see what this poem is trying to say...
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| Re: Twilight Affair by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
3-Dec-07/12:21 AM |
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This is good. Maybe shouldn't be #1. But it deserves a 10.
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| Re: One dot.And the rest is our lives by Prince of Void |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
3-Dec-07/12:26 AM |
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It's like reading a surreal painting.
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| Re: One dot.And the rest is our lives by Prince of Void |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
3-Dec-07/12:27 AM |
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Or maybe the mushrooms on my pizza went bad... or good, depending on what you look for in mushrooms.
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| Re: Zin/Enough/Things/Squeeze/Flow by gregsamsa222 |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
3-Dec-07/12:29 AM |
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| Re: Ten solid facts about -=Dark Angel=-, by his biggest palm frond, me. by horus8 |
Dark Angle 70.181.103.149 |
3-Dec-07/12:37 AM |
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I think the Internet has lost sight of what it's really all about, that being shit, aids, dwarfs, and homos.... but lucky for us, DA is here to remind us with the vigorous thrust of his poetic fingers, over and over again! Bravo! Anyways, nice job summing up this man of mystery in a Letterman-esque sort of way.
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