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Home coming of her love (Other) by Jessina
Sighing profoundly she saunter
Down the corridor of her chamber
Slow was her movement
Like a weary itinerant
Lost in a world of sheer gloom
Lounging restively on the stairs so plume
Quivering in hoary morn
Clinching her ruddy coverlet
Soft and chilly breeze gently wafted
Those braided curls festooned once
With exquisite pearls from Venice
Tumbled on her delicate collar
Reminiscence of bygone memories
Of those incessant ecstasies
Strolling languidly in soothing moon lit night
Clasping the hands of her prince so might
Citadel bells began to chime
Melody of splendid rhyme
Proclaiming the blissful home coming
Of her darling prince so charming
Here he comes leaping the torrent
Graceful, majestic and valiant
Merrily riding his snow white mare
Heads up with brawny spirit; ever so rare
Swiftly she hears a gentle knock; on the carved ivory door
Aching the fiber of her entire core
Slowly she unlock the silvery latch
Drifting herself in a tender catch
There he stands; with shimmering smile
Rocking her wheezing for a while
Hastily met their parching eyes
To unfold the desires of myriad days.
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Overall Rank: 6397
Posted: November 29, 2007 3:34 AM PST; Last modified: November 29, 2007 3:34 AM PST
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For eg. ... just a suggestion,
She sighs profoundly and saunters
Down the corridor of her chamber.
Her movement was slow
Like a weary itinerant.
Lost in a world of sheeer gloom,
She lounges restively on stairs so plume
Quivers in hoary morn
And clinches her ruddy coverlet.
There seems to be a slight conflict in tenses.... for which you have to be careful about. But, nice choice of words.