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The Story of Wolf and Moon (Free verse) by Blackshadow
This is a tale, countless ages told Among the Wolf, to cub from old. ~ It is a story of true love, Between Wolf below, and Moon above. ~ The Wolf and Moon were One they say, Lovers, Friends, to this very day. ~ The sky at night their hunting grounds, Their depth of love, it knew no bounds. ~ The Wolf one night, in foolish pride, Chased a star that tried to hide. ~ They fell to Earth, Wolfs' heart grew sore, The Moon still flew; the Wolf no more. ~ The Wolf at night calls to His Mate, All alone, cursing Fate. ~ And to this day the Wolf will cry, A mournful Howl to the night sky. ~ The faithful Moon shines loving light, To call the Wolf back to their flight. ~ To light His way back to her side, Apart, due to His foolish pride. ~ The Wolves tell of a night to come, When Wolf returns to Moon, His One. ~ This is the story all cubs know, Of Moon above, and Wolf below. ~ But the tale isn't done you see, kiana's Moon; the Wolf is Me ~ My Moon has shone her tender light, This Wolf on wings of love took flight. ~ Moon shone her light to guide Wolf Home No longer will I walk alone. ~ Hand in hand, side by side We fly, To hunt once more 'cross the night sky. ~ Our path, it leads Us to Our fate So grateful to My true Soul mate. ~ So cubs must learn a new story, kiana's Moon, and Wolf is Me. ~ The two are One, forever more, True love the future holds in store. ~ We talk of dreams, and secrets shared, In furs at night, Our Souls are bared. ~ Y/you wonder how this story ends, One more verse will tell all My F/friends ~ The Wolf.....it mates for life you see, kiana's Moon; the Wolf is Me.

Up the ladder: peeper's envy
Down the ladder: "In the Air"

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6666665
Weighted score: 5.0794687
Overall Rank: 6437
Posted: May 30, 2007 2:42 PM PDT; Last modified: May 30, 2007 2:44 PM PDT
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[9] Skamper @ 202.6.128.86 | 31-May-07/9:27 AM | Reply
Love the story - but the spacing distracted me a little
[n/a] Blackshadow @ 204.126.127.253 > Skamper | 31-May-07/1:26 PM | Reply
Ahh...sorry, it was originally spaced for a yahoo 360 blog.
[7] Dovina @ 64.130.138.231 | 1-Jun-07/7:48 AM | Reply
Some wordiness,such as "It is a story of true love" could be just "a story of love," similar suggestions throughout.

"Our path, it leads Us to Our fate" is such a common theme that, expecially when said straight out, comes accross stale. Otherwise, some good rhythms and some good lines.
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