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Stained (Free verse) by fadedlove and so ill bite off my nails
cut off my tear stained sleeve
ill swallow all these pills
though the pain, they wont relieve
ill throw away my mascara
because it never stays on
and ill unplug the phone
because it never goes off
Up the ladder:
The rift
Down the ladder:
The Better Beggar
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Posted: January 16, 2007 12:26 PM PST; Last modified: January 16, 2007 12:26 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0794687 Overall Rank: 6495 Comments:
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Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199
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19-Jan-07/8:53 AM
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A poem of such importance as this should have a special display case manufactured. And the sign attached to that display case should be annotated with the simple, yet powerful words: "Here are words of such crushingly strong significance that to read them is to stare at one's own reflection and see to the very core of one's soul. I caution you reader that once read you will never look upon the hollow husk of your former life without feeling a jolt of sorrow for the unenlightened former you which cowered like some kind of terribly liquidised mollusc in a puddle of ignorance." - 8 -
This so effortlessly achieves the vague air of guffing claptrap that wheezes out of all good poetry. Sublimely beautiful. A triumph. You have talent: use it.
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