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Coffee House Adjacent (Free verse) by Enkidu Intellectuals tend to congregate
And explain to each other
What they already know
There is a lot of laughing
And the retorts are extravagant
Everyone else is too busy
Being stupid to give a damn
There is a lot of laughing
But the hugs are warmer
Up the ladder:
Stained
Down the ladder:
Proctor, the patient must be beaten.
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Posted: July 12, 2007 12:36 AM PDT; Last modified: July 12, 2007 12:37 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.0794687 Overall Rank: 6494 Comments:
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Dovina @ 63.251.186.252
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13-Jul-07/8:49 AM
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I think it would be stronger with fewer words. "then to" "to each other" "there is" - What do these add?
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