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Coffee House Adjacent (Free verse) by Enkidu

Intellectuals tend to congregate And explain to each other What they already know There is a lot of laughing And the retorts are extravagant Everyone else is too busy Being stupid to give a damn There is a lot of laughing But the hugs are warmer

Dovina 13-Jul-07/8:49 AM
I think it would be stronger with fewer words. "then to" "to each other" "there is" - What do these add?




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