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Travails of one decade (Other) by Prince of Void Travails of one decade
It made me forget and forgive
Whom and what I lost
in this spotless mind
And I left them to all my dreams
for the moment of time
When I stood alone
And buried all fears of losing
In where Iâve been grieving
For what the sky is raining
Yeah all my tears of yearning
But I canât stop anything
As time is passing us
And all your memories
They'll be only things
That last here in my burning heart
Where there are no fear and no desire
Just yearning to wake you up again
To see you here by my side
Maybe in the other side
In the other life
Up the ladder:
Early Morning Thought
Down the ladder:
What greater love
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Posted: December 2, 2007 11:46 PM PST; Last modified: December 2, 2007 11:46 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.880797 Overall Rank: 10242 Comments:
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Dark Angle @ 70.181.103.149
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3-Dec-07/12:17 AM
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Less telling and more showing. I don't really see what this poem is trying to say...
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Prince of Void @ 80.71.124.246
> Dark Angle
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4-Dec-07/11:01 AM
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you're right ...But I'm a director of cinema trying to show more and less telling a detailed story ..maybe it's not prefect well I'll do my best to make it best and thanx for commenting yours are better than mine ..but we both try to keep all values and concepts of our own way to explain the beauties ...I'm trying new things ...and well different ways of telling stories .. more new narrative structures will come soon
A nice poem with difference.
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