Snake heaven may have tall golden canes, but virgins for the Pilgrim Puritans? And that last verse with its semicolon and new sentence midway, well, look at the grammar.

this i don't feel was all that good - 5 - -lia

It's far fetched, but with enough truth to consider developing.

interesting - 7 - -lia

reminds me of a poem I wrote :) Very nice

sad noess depres sion suic ide. Got ya. Probably a bit ambitious to do an acrostic in this manner and have it make sense.

absolutely excellent - 10 - -megan

i like it - 9 - -emlyn

seems more like a pimple poem ...... -emlyn

i love this - 10 - -emlyn

That has to be the longest poem about not being able to write a poem I've ever read.

intersting...... -nessa

i give this a 10 because it is good, but i must ask why you included your age - it doesnt really make any difference at all how old you are - and it just seems to give the impressions that want almost a pity vote, for being younger than the rest of us -nessa

content is simplistic, form is painful; rhymes read forced, rhythm jounces about without much care for sensibilities--as I read it, at laest.

"it's" -> its (twice) The last stanza is interesting. I'd run with that more and the abstract less. Maybe making it more immediate-- "In my mind today was a tractor trailor on its side crossing two lanes and a concrete barrier to catch me at seventy miles per hour; and no way to move." 7 for the final stanza, though the rest really should bring it down more.

"Bain" ? "That would be the best I could for" ? "My logic and fervor are equal are equal" ? Overall, I'd normally hate this. But it does make a good, dense square. It's sort of an "everyman's" poem--possibly pimple, but it doesn't rhyme or force structure. So... Hmm. 7.

I liked some of the breathless feel to it, but came out more like a minor (yeah, there's no such thing--stil...) asthma attack than anything thoughtforcing. While somewhat atypical in exactly how it feels forced, it doesn't work for me.

Hmm. Going back in--this could use some rhythm work. The deerflies are out of place. Though I still like most of it. That's certainly a bonus.

"rivers'" -> "river's" Since you didn't capitalize the beginning of each line, it's a bit odd that you chose to after a semi-colon. A moderate collection of images, with a point, but they don't gel for me. It's too haphazardly stacatto.

I really like the first two stanzas. s3 doesn't do it for me at all, and s4... hmm. s4 is decent. s3 really doesn't do it for me, though.