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Pilgrim (Free verse) by richa If a snake tried to stand up
on the tip of its tail,
its task would be less
than the pilgrimâs
contending with his crust
as the bread stales.
To feast and then face
a long stretch with no food
is bad for the soul,
and bad for the arms
that lift the spade
and divide the mud.
But there is heaven
and metaphor the loaves.
The virgins for moslems
and tall golden canes
for the snakes
who walk like men.
Up the ladder:
HAHAA(LAUGHING)
Down the ladder:
pull
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Posted: March 7, 2005 2:29 PM PST; Last modified: March 7, 2005 3:55 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.536413 Overall Rank: 2623 Comments:
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Dovina @ 12.72.6.27
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7-Mar-05/3:41 PM
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Snake heaven may have tall golden canes, but virgins for the Pilgrim Puritans? And that last verse with its semicolon and new sentence midway, well, look at the grammar.
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richa @ 81.178.193.41
> Dovina
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8-Mar-05/12:02 AM
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Virgins for the puritans came from the idea that your time on earth is toil to contrast with heaven. In effect your reward in heaven is the opposite of your discipline on earth.
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richa @ 81.178.193.41
> richa
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8-Mar-05/2:43 AM
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I am not entirely happy with the third verse, but I thought the first two came off rather well.
richa. you posted. how wierd. the crust reference makes me grin.
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