I don't think you get that in limericks the rhyming words are supposed to be funny ones. Or even just odd ones, like - oh I don't know - 'laser,' 'Negro,' or 'rupture'.

I know a Canadian here whose knobs log me off every time.

re "What can I say that hasn't already been said?" A lot of things, if you wrote about anything else :-(

"part of" bothered me. The rest is really quite good.

I don't think fat people tend to be jolly. I think they tend to be poor and hence have nothing to be jolly about :(

The two commas in Line 4 add a charming hesitancy, which, mingled with the words “at least” must provide these oft-willing women with a sense dominance and control so often lacking where their pleasure is not foremost as implied in this lovely rendering.

Except for some confusing spacing and "my phone calls are touching," which seems to change the focus, I like it.

I didn't get past the first verse due to spelling.

funny

If only you could find a way to introduce some ass buggery.

metamorphose? Of course, this is bunk, but you know that. Points for different, but then you could use that fucked up font...what the fuck is it called?............Wingdings, and make it completely illegible.

Liked it better before. The language seemed clearer. The stuff you have added is interesting, but poorly worded, imho.

Can't say I loved the poem, but I cannot give less than a 10 to "LintyWeenis"

Excellent. So far the best poem I have ever read!

I like it. It reminds me of me about 2 months ago before I got my love. Keep going for it, once you get it, you won't regret the pain you went through.

Who's that folkish painter in the bronx, a latin man? That guy paints with words sometimes to instill the point that our minds have the amazing ability to organize chaos. I like the the concept at the end. I thnk this is nice.

Cute. But with it being a joke and all, I think the short lines and excessive punctuation are a bit too portentious. I mean punchlines shouldn't be so tortured, right?

Should have kept ethnic studies. This is pretty much prose as well so there was little need for all the flashy effects. Not bad.

Sudden Death Syndrome. Don't get the rest of it though.

this was interesting - and if flowed nicely - 8 - -lia