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Severed (Free verse) by shadowaura My eyes wax dim
[From your hollow truths]
And the screams within
Fade [to silence]
My breath is corrupt
...Tainted [with rust]
And I keep hoping
Hatred will bow [to love]
[In this beautiful abyss]
[Of immortal anguish]
You can hear me
Praying [for solace]
Father, I love you
I love you, Mother..
My soul aches
[To see you severed]
I cannot bear these
Callused emotions
Syncopated symphonies
And endless tears
[Of your broken matrimony]
T.J.L
age 14
Up the ladder:
The Width and the Breadth of the Hedge
Down the ladder:
Outside the Perfection, Into the Yellow
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.2
Posted: September 4, 2003 5:17 PM PDT; Last modified: September 4, 2003 5:17 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.2622466 Overall Rank: 3955 Comments:
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deleted user @ 63.230.192.38
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4-Sep-03/6:36 PM
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Very vivid imagery! Well done. :)
whoa! love it
i give this a 10 because it is good, but i must ask why you included your age - it doesnt really make any difference at all how old you are - and it just seems to give the impressions that want almost a pity vote, for being younger than the rest of us
-nessa
How many poemranker users are you?
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