poemranker ::an early discovery (reworking) by richa

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Free verse № 74137

an early discovery (reworking)

by richa

Member since 2002 · Posted 8 Nov 2003 · 7 comments

Kept tidy with cutting the row of spruce to the fence, a night crept around it. And like the nights impinging darkness I, grew over twenty years so high to look over and down the embankment at the weather worn willow an infant in mind.

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7 comments

[n/a] horus8 8-Nov-03/1:16 PM Reply
Your wanker award alone catches a ten from this poeat.
[10] SupremeDreamer 8-Nov-03/4:42 PM Reply
Pity the trees that stoop- 10.
[10] INTRANSIT 9-Nov-03/6:24 AM Reply
For the record, I don't agree with deleting comments. And I don't agree with your wings either. This cut SOUNDS perfect to me and I followed it easily. I think the problem with the springs was you were trying/thinking about compression springs versus extension springs. The only extension springs I can think of are on screen doors and engine throttles. Both bad Ideas for a poem.
[8] sliver 9-Nov-03/9:42 AM Reply
O.K. sounds right to me
[10] http://mulberryfairy 9-Nov-03/10:47 AM Reply
Interesting twist to identify with the upright tree instead of the willow (especially in the willow's weather worn-ness), which most poets would probably prefer.
[10] Caducus 23-Nov-03/5:43 AM Reply
someone who deserves the top my friend 10
[9] i_am_the_popsicle 7-Mar-05/3:59 PM Reply
i like it - 9 -
-emlyn