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an early discovery (reworking) (Free verse) by richa

Kept tidy with cutting the row of spruce to the fence, a night crept around it. And like the nights impinging darkness I, grew over twenty years so high to look over and down the embankment at the weather worn willow an infant in mind.

INTRANSIT 9-Nov-03/6:24 AM
For the record, I don't agree with deleting comments. And I don't agree with your wings either. This cut SOUNDS perfect to me and I followed it easily. I think the problem with the springs was you were trying/thinking about compression springs versus extension springs. The only extension springs I can think of are on screen doors and engine throttles. Both bad Ideas for a poem.




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